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for this plain piece of paper

3/8/2008 c1 612simpleplan13
Can be part of a story book.. storybook

The first part... I think the first "this plain piece of paper" is supposed to be the title? If so I might bold it... if not I think its a bit repetitive

I like the rhyming in the piece and I also really like all the things you mention that can be done with paper... especially the last one.. it's very sweet

The only thing is mentioning hundreds of words for every page it took seemed odd since its about one plain piece of paper.. I might say the plain piece of paper could become a pivotal moment in a storybook or something like that

Just a thought..anyhow nice job

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3/8/2008 c1 Desparate-for-his-Love
Can make wonders sour

Don't really know if this line is correct and therefore don't understand it. Did you mean sour or soar? Soar makes more sense to me context wise but maybe you meant it another way? Otherwise pretty decent poem. Enough to make me wish I could write worth a spit. =D

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