for this plain piece of paper3/8/2008 c1 
612simpleplan13
Can be part of a story book.. storybook
The first part... I think the first "this plain piece of paper" is supposed to be the title? If so I might bold it... if not I think its a bit repetitive
I like the rhyming in the piece and I also really like all the things you mention that can be done with paper... especially the last one.. it's very sweet
The only thing is mentioning hundreds of words for every page it took seemed odd since its about one plain piece of paper.. I might say the plain piece of paper could become a pivotal moment in a storybook or something like that
Just a thought..anyhow nice job
PS If your bored check out the Review Game and its Review Marathon (links in my profile)
612simpleplan13Can be part of a story book.. storybook
The first part... I think the first "this plain piece of paper" is supposed to be the title? If so I might bold it... if not I think its a bit repetitive
I like the rhyming in the piece and I also really like all the things you mention that can be done with paper... especially the last one.. it's very sweet
The only thing is mentioning hundreds of words for every page it took seemed odd since its about one plain piece of paper.. I might say the plain piece of paper could become a pivotal moment in a storybook or something like that
Just a thought..anyhow nice job
PS If your bored check out the Review Game and its Review Marathon (links in my profile)
3/8/2008 c1 Desparate-for-his-Love
Can make wonders sour
Don't really know if this line is correct and therefore don't understand it. Did you mean sour or soar? Soar makes more sense to me context wise but maybe you meant it another way? Otherwise pretty decent poem. Enough to make me wish I could write worth a spit. =D
Can make wonders sour
Don't really know if this line is correct and therefore don't understand it. Did you mean sour or soar? Soar makes more sense to me context wise but maybe you meant it another way? Otherwise pretty decent poem. Enough to make me wish I could write worth a spit. =D