for Whirl3/20/2008 c1 
12sappyromancealert
Great so far. I will read the rest of the chapters soon. I love Dora's snarky, don't-take-any-bullshit attitude. Characters like hers can often be very stereotypical but you've managed to avoid that trap and make up a very unique teen character. Love it!
12sappyromancealertGreat so far. I will read the rest of the chapters soon. I love Dora's snarky, don't-take-any-bullshit attitude. Characters like hers can often be very stereotypical but you've managed to avoid that trap and make up a very unique teen character. Love it!
3/8/2008 c1 12LostInLalaLand
You're a good writer and your story has a flow, but for some reason I'm not really taken to it.
It seems, to me, a little cliche. A story everyone has read a million times without really reading it. Rebellious teenager... misunderstood by her parents, yada yada yada.
You're such a good writer though, and you know your way with words. It could be so much more.
Think about it.
LostInLalaLand (with the Review Marathon)
12LostInLalaLandYou're a good writer and your story has a flow, but for some reason I'm not really taken to it.
It seems, to me, a little cliche. A story everyone has read a million times without really reading it. Rebellious teenager... misunderstood by her parents, yada yada yada.
You're such a good writer though, and you know your way with words. It could be so much more.
Think about it.
LostInLalaLand (with the Review Marathon)