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3/10/2008 c1 216ygg
I can relate to that feeling.. Love the use of "titan tree"; it gives the whole poem a higher density, which fits very well with the connotations of "groggy". Good work!
3/9/2008 c1 123454321
'titan tree'? I'm not really sure what you were trying to say here, but maybe you should try a different adjective.

The rest of this piece flows very well. Your use of the word 'groggy' is very good in relation of where you are going with it.

-J.A.

Courtesy of the review marathon (link on profile).
3/9/2008 c1 59Tranquil Thorns
That must be one massive headache. =P

Anyway, I like how you put the pain into words. 'The weight of a titan tree' is a strong line. I like that description.

Feel better!

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