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3/11/2008 c1 224Ryan Schiff
Haiku are great, aren't they?

They have this great power to fit so much into such a small package.

My only slight suggestion would be to go back and put punctuations in. Other than that I really like this haiku, it works very well on its own.
3/9/2008 c1 123454321
This piece has a fair amount of spine in it that I find lacking in many haikus. Good work.

Your lack of punctuation works to place emphasis where you want it; a feat not many can manage without looking ignorant.

Sorry I cannot add any criticism, but haikus are not my forte.

-J.A.

Courtesy of the review marathon (link on profile).

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