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11/14/2008 c17 2Yoseph
The suspense is killing me! Put up the next chapter!
7/19/2008 c16 8R.E.D. the animator
Yet another view point from the enemy army. From how this is going I'd almost say that perhaps Zach is fighting on the wrong side.
7/18/2008 c16 2FuzzyDoom
Centaurs? WTF? lol j/k Awesome story and I really like your writing. You are good and you'd better finish this story before my head explodes from the suspense! Also, since you have trouble with military ranks:

/personal/faculty/pocock/ranks.htm

I use that site alot so it'll probably help you a bit.
7/17/2008 c16 wilko4523
things are heating up even furthur it seems

lol

xx
6/11/2008 c2 Nathan93
Really cool stuff enjoyed book one and am about to read book 2
6/6/2008 c15 wilko4523
oh uh looks like zach's in trouble

things are really heating up now lol

xx
6/6/2008 c15 8R.E.D. the animator
Not a cliff hanger! NO!

Oh well. I hope Byrd get's what's comming to him.
6/6/2008 c12 2Yoseph
Sweet! They're fighting brits! Does this mean that the Eastern and western alliances are fighting in mixed company? Or do the EA and WA still exist?
6/6/2008 c15 ilmiopassato
Nice action-packed chapters. I'm really interested in this Colonial Soldier thing, very mysterious and shady. And although Kristi seems pretty b*tchy to me so far (sleeping with people for entry, ew), I also get the feeling that there might be something more to her character than straight-up villiany. So I think I'll reserve judgment on her for now. Good job!
6/6/2008 c11 Yoseph
TWSN? What does that stand for? Twenty worlds ship navy? Why not TCS? Twenty colonies ship. It's shorter and esier to understand. Other than that, nice chapter.
6/5/2008 c10 ilmiopassato
The FALARs sound really cool, and I've been enjoying these last few chapters. Sad about Zach's bro and buddies dying but, well, that's just war-so good job there with the realism.

The only thing that bothered me in this particular chapter was the ranks. I'm not sure if you're going for a different ranking system or not, but senior NCOs aren't made company commanders (and company commanders don't command battalions, either). Zach & Co. also had HUGE rank advancements, going from corporals to gunnery sergeants, so that's not really realistic. Also, it wouldn't be a commissioning, as that is a term used for becoming an officer.

Sorry about the long list of corrections, I'm really loving your story and I think it's great so far. Just thought I'd point those rank things out in case you weren't aware of them. I remember you sending me a PM about military terms before, so if you're unsure feel free to message me. I'll be glad to help you out. ;-)
6/3/2008 c14 8R.E.D. the animator
So there might be a way to cure Zach after all!
6/3/2008 c14 wilko4523
o intresting stuff

this coupe or reconstruction as they put it sounds intresting-it would be nice to have zach to return to is normal self but at what cost if he does join...

hugz

x
5/31/2008 c13 R.E.D. the animator
Remind me never to get Zach angry. That was amazing!
5/21/2008 c5 ilmiopassato
Whoa that's nuts he lifted a whole ATV! Very cool.
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