for Chased3/14/2008 c1 
9Soul Decay
I can tell you without reading it your big problem... Paragrphs. you should paragraph everytime a new person talks and when ever the event chages. if u find its still too blocky then. just make paragraphs in random places to make it easyer to read.
~Soul
9Soul DecayI can tell you without reading it your big problem... Paragrphs. you should paragraph everytime a new person talks and when ever the event chages. if u find its still too blocky then. just make paragraphs in random places to make it easyer to read.
~Soul