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146Sexy Vampirechick
Um..your format is quite weird I must say.How about trying to seperate them in paragraphs?Other than that your story is quite interesting.
146Sexy VampirechickUm..your format is quite weird I must say.How about trying to seperate them in paragraphs?Other than that your story is quite interesting.
3/13/2008 c1 myapologiesnolongerinuse
It seems pretty interesting from what I can make out from the summary, but I honestly can't read past the first sentence when it's not separated into paragraphs. It gives people headaches. Please, please, please consider doing that.
And for the first sentence, there's no need to capitalize 'truly.'
Other than that, I look forward to reading it if you can separate it into paragraphs.
It seems pretty interesting from what I can make out from the summary, but I honestly can't read past the first sentence when it's not separated into paragraphs. It gives people headaches. Please, please, please consider doing that.
And for the first sentence, there's no need to capitalize 'truly.'
Other than that, I look forward to reading it if you can separate it into paragraphs.