for I Have a Dad5/27/2008 c1 
146Sexy Vampirechick
Aw..such a sweet poem.I liked how you have I am... and then stating one thing you like about your dad.It also helps build up the stanza before last. That was creative. The italized of have was a perfect ending.It placed the ending touch to your poem making it end smoothly.Very nice!
146Sexy VampirechickAw..such a sweet poem.I liked how you have I am... and then stating one thing you like about your dad.It also helps build up the stanza before last. That was creative. The italized of have was a perfect ending.It placed the ending touch to your poem making it end smoothly.Very nice!
4/20/2008 c1 216angels know the rest
I agree that the ending is good; it's my favorite part. Plus I can relate to the poem because I am very thankful for my own dad. The word "faja" seemed a little silly to me (probably because I hadn't heard it before) but that's fine because the tone was lightheartened anyway. Good job!
216angels know the restI agree that the ending is good; it's my favorite part. Plus I can relate to the poem because I am very thankful for my own dad. The word "faja" seemed a little silly to me (probably because I hadn't heard it before) but that's fine because the tone was lightheartened anyway. Good job!
3/31/2008 c1 174a silenced revolution
Aw, very sweet, and I like the ending, since so many people don't even have a father. Cute, innocent. As poetry I think it needs more imagery of the 'show don't tell' type, but overall, not bad.
174a silenced revolutionAw, very sweet, and I like the ending, since so many people don't even have a father. Cute, innocent. As poetry I think it needs more imagery of the 'show don't tell' type, but overall, not bad.