for Ludicrous3/25/2008 c1 
879Moondog Dozier
Again, I like how you've overwritten the details in order to create a more literalite standpoint. The diction works well to obtain a certain mood that draws the reader into the vocality. Good write. MD:77.
879Moondog DozierAgain, I like how you've overwritten the details in order to create a more literalite standpoint. The diction works well to obtain a certain mood that draws the reader into the vocality. Good write. MD:77.
3/21/2008 c1 612simpleplan13
I like this.. the idea is easy to relate to and the word choice was really amazing... I also love the phrase "unrealistic reality" the only thing I might do is put some more punctuation in there... you ave some, but it was seriously lacking in other parts, but that's just a thought
Nice job
612simpleplan13I like this.. the idea is easy to relate to and the word choice was really amazing... I also love the phrase "unrealistic reality" the only thing I might do is put some more punctuation in there... you ave some, but it was seriously lacking in other parts, but that's just a thought
Nice job
3/21/2008 c1 82Billie.Joelle
You're back! I haven't heard anything from you in a while, I was almost starting to go through withdrawals! This one was REALLY good. Worth the wait, almost. Favorite line: "To lacerate the final sliver of decayed ambition" WOW! That just jumped out at me. Incredible, Lurid, Incredible
~BJ
82Billie.JoelleYou're back! I haven't heard anything from you in a while, I was almost starting to go through withdrawals! This one was REALLY good. Worth the wait, almost. Favorite line: "To lacerate the final sliver of decayed ambition" WOW! That just jumped out at me. Incredible, Lurid, Incredible
~BJ
3/21/2008 c1 43lookin4nemo
this is amazing! Ludricrous! I love it! I love your use of all those "big" words. It gives a perfect description in one word! I could never use that many "big" words! that is what makes you a true poet! Great work! and looking forward for more!
43lookin4nemothis is amazing! Ludricrous! I love it! I love your use of all those "big" words. It gives a perfect description in one word! I could never use that many "big" words! that is what makes you a true poet! Great work! and looking forward for more!
3/21/2008 c1 76Kaia Zeffirelli
I can definitely relate to this. As usual, amazing and flawless! Keep it up- I can't wait to read more! =)
-Katrina
76Kaia ZeffirelliI can definitely relate to this. As usual, amazing and flawless! Keep it up- I can't wait to read more! =)
-Katrina