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for Ah, The Falling Angel May as Well Be A Woman

3/23/2008 c1 disabled account
Not bad, although it seems to need a little extra something to lift it beyond the classification of cliche. The fact that the narrator specifically addresses (her?) audience adds to the poem immensely. A question: Did You mean "should" in the third line, not "shall?" (as in, "should your curious eyes wonder, I'm sure to please ...") I like the idea behind it, but it needs some work. Adieu, Kat

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