for Used12/30/2010 c18 
1splinteringtheglass
Okay, I know this one's complete already, but OHMYGOODNESS IT WAS SO FRIGGING BRILLIANT. Seriously, you should like write a book or something. Hell, I'd totally buy it. Eek I think I might have nightmares bout Trevor tonight or something. Majorly creepy guy, that one. LOVE IT :D
1splinteringtheglassOkay, I know this one's complete already, but OHMYGOODNESS IT WAS SO FRIGGING BRILLIANT. Seriously, you should like write a book or something. Hell, I'd totally buy it. Eek I think I might have nightmares bout Trevor tonight or something. Majorly creepy guy, that one. LOVE IT :D
11/3/2010 c18 17Lady of romance world88
Hi. I love your story and its better than original. :D WOW! I can't believe that Taylor is crazy guy and wants to kill Natalie because of what happens to his parent. It was accident of what happen in the world. No one's fault. I can't believe that Taylor rape Natalie and kill her parents. It was wrong. I was surprised that he used Avary in this plan to ruin Natalie's life. Why does Taylor wants Natalie's child for? Oh no. I can't believe that Taylor killed Avery. She saved Natalie's life how could that happen to Avery? *sad smile* I glad that Morgan, Maddi, Maria and Becca finally back to Natalie as friends again. :D What a cute name for Natalie's daughter, Isabella. :) Aww how cute that Brandon propose to Natalie + i glad that they are together again. :) Is Taylor return into their life or still in jail for dead sentence? Keep writing. :D
17Lady of romance world88Hi. I love your story and its better than original. :D WOW! I can't believe that Taylor is crazy guy and wants to kill Natalie because of what happens to his parent. It was accident of what happen in the world. No one's fault. I can't believe that Taylor rape Natalie and kill her parents. It was wrong. I was surprised that he used Avary in this plan to ruin Natalie's life. Why does Taylor wants Natalie's child for? Oh no. I can't believe that Taylor killed Avery. She saved Natalie's life how could that happen to Avery? *sad smile* I glad that Morgan, Maddi, Maria and Becca finally back to Natalie as friends again. :D What a cute name for Natalie's daughter, Isabella. :) Aww how cute that Brandon propose to Natalie + i glad that they are together again. :) Is Taylor return into their life or still in jail for dead sentence? Keep writing. :D
9/30/2010 c18 rosegirl1114
I love what a good girl Bella is, my sibs are never like that, and I always knew that she would end up with Brandon in the end, this was such a good story and though I wish Avery didn't have to die, I'm happy that Trevor did, not that I'm sadistic or anything but Trevor deserved to die, and Brandon made himself 10 times awesomer by killing him
I love what a good girl Bella is, my sibs are never like that, and I always knew that she would end up with Brandon in the end, this was such a good story and though I wish Avery didn't have to die, I'm happy that Trevor did, not that I'm sadistic or anything but Trevor deserved to die, and Brandon made himself 10 times awesomer by killing him
4/4/2009 c18 brittany
i'm kat's friend.
this is so amazing. this whole story. it brought tears to my eyes.
i love it!
i'm kat's friend.
this is so amazing. this whole story. it brought tears to my eyes.
i love it!
11/11/2008 c18 TheAmazingBritt
I hated and loved this story all at the same time. I've never read a story that has made me laugh and cry all in the same chapter. I hated that "Trevor" was one sick f**k but I loved that Brandon was the one to get rid of him. This was an amazing story. And I never want to read it again because it's actually painful to read. But It was great and very different.
Twilight
I hated and loved this story all at the same time. I've never read a story that has made me laugh and cry all in the same chapter. I hated that "Trevor" was one sick f**k but I loved that Brandon was the one to get rid of him. This was an amazing story. And I never want to read it again because it's actually painful to read. But It was great and very different.
Twilight
8/14/2008 c18 The Critic
Well, it was a sweet story. But before you even think about getting it published, do look at your storyline and the believability of the characters. Sometimes (well, a lot of times) they gush their words out. It doesn't sound very 'real', and the airheadedness of some of them is unbelievable - even when they're not supposed to sound airy, it comes out that way.
You're evil guy? I thought that he had something wrong with his head, not a rational desire to screw her over. And the whole reason for it? Too rushed and not believable. It would have been so much better if he had like a possesive love for her or something strange like that, rather than it being over money, of all things.
Avery? Shallow, bitchy and the twist happened too fast.
All your characters seem a little young. You can't believe that fourteen year olds are in love with each other.
Look over it.
Well, it was a sweet story. But before you even think about getting it published, do look at your storyline and the believability of the characters. Sometimes (well, a lot of times) they gush their words out. It doesn't sound very 'real', and the airheadedness of some of them is unbelievable - even when they're not supposed to sound airy, it comes out that way.
You're evil guy? I thought that he had something wrong with his head, not a rational desire to screw her over. And the whole reason for it? Too rushed and not believable. It would have been so much better if he had like a possesive love for her or something strange like that, rather than it being over money, of all things.
Avery? Shallow, bitchy and the twist happened too fast.
All your characters seem a little young. You can't believe that fourteen year olds are in love with each other.
Look over it.
7/1/2008 c2 DELETE ME DEAR GOD
Finally got an account. Put up a poem just so I'd have something. But, to the story! dun dun da dun! Bi*chy villian: check. Handsome looker: check. Slightly misfit, yet intelligent heroine: check. Looks like you've got yourself the makings of a classic highschool romance story. One promblem I had, since you told me to be truthful. I like your style. Whoa, I felt like I should be wearing a fedora with a cigar in my mouth saying "I like your style, kid." lol. Scary how I can amuse myself. BUT anyway, my teensy problem is that the dialogue is very predictable. But then again, it is chapter two, so maybe I'm jumping the gun. I'll read on! But, good so far. :D
Finally got an account. Put up a poem just so I'd have something. But, to the story! dun dun da dun! Bi*chy villian: check. Handsome looker: check. Slightly misfit, yet intelligent heroine: check. Looks like you've got yourself the makings of a classic highschool romance story. One promblem I had, since you told me to be truthful. I like your style. Whoa, I felt like I should be wearing a fedora with a cigar in my mouth saying "I like your style, kid." lol. Scary how I can amuse myself. BUT anyway, my teensy problem is that the dialogue is very predictable. But then again, it is chapter two, so maybe I'm jumping the gun. I'll read on! But, good so far. :D
6/30/2008 c18 6what.the.pants
I loved this story so much. I cried and it was written very well. Props to you.
6what.the.pantsI loved this story so much. I cried and it was written very well. Props to you.
6/30/2008 c18 8xwordslingerx
Definitely sappy. =P Not boring though. It was cute! I agree, it IS sad that it's over now... It was just so good!
Don't think I found anything wrong with this chapter... haha Amazing, isn't it?
8xwordslingerxDefinitely sappy. =P Not boring though. It was cute! I agree, it IS sad that it's over now... It was just so good!
Don't think I found anything wrong with this chapter... haha Amazing, isn't it?
6/30/2008 c18 1life9OWL
it was to good...though i was expectin somethin much better than this...it was good...d endin was perfect! good job...
1life9OWLit was to good...though i was expectin somethin much better than this...it was good...d endin was perfect! good job...
6/29/2008 c18 8Egoll
im sure you will figure what to do with your life after the story...mine tends to end up in starting other stories...i enjoyed yours and i hope you will write even more!
8Egollim sure you will figure what to do with your life after the story...mine tends to end up in starting other stories...i enjoyed yours and i hope you will write even more!
6/29/2008 c18 5NotABanana
*gasp*
I'm sad that this story is over. Seriously one of my FAVORITES. Very well done! I applaud you!
And yes, though the ending was sappy, it was totally what I wanted to happen. As a couple, Brandom and Natalie are AH-MAZING. hahaha
again, job well done!
5NotABanana*gasp*
I'm sad that this story is over. Seriously one of my FAVORITES. Very well done! I applaud you!
And yes, though the ending was sappy, it was totally what I wanted to happen. As a couple, Brandom and Natalie are AH-MAZING. hahaha
again, job well done!
6/29/2008 c18 Grenna-Chae
Sappy, but very very good. Bella says the most adorable things! She's so cute!
I love the way that Brandon proposes, too, saying that he knows she doesn't like cliches. That was so sweet! I wonder what their wedding would be like...
I'm sad it's over too! But I really enjoyed reading this! Good luck with anything else you write!
Sappy, but very very good. Bella says the most adorable things! She's so cute!
I love the way that Brandon proposes, too, saying that he knows she doesn't like cliches. That was so sweet! I wonder what their wedding would be like...
I'm sad it's over too! But I really enjoyed reading this! Good luck with anything else you write!