for Theresa E
3/26/2008 c1 233kelsi bones
While it's a beautiful subject, i'm not so sure about your rhyming scheme. It feel strange to read the first four lines rhyming, and them two random sections of rhyming for the rest of poem. I would go with all lines rhyming (a,a,b,b,c,c etc), or none of them rhyming.