for Scarlet Willow8/21/2010 c1 
194Anthony Tesla
I was checking some of your poetry and I knew you had some kind of songwriting style, and then you mentioned that Bob Dylan is one of your influences, and now everything makes more sense now.
It has some kind of old-fashioned charm and you can make a good blend between mundane things and more complicated figures of speech.
194Anthony TeslaI was checking some of your poetry and I knew you had some kind of songwriting style, and then you mentioned that Bob Dylan is one of your influences, and now everything makes more sense now.
It has some kind of old-fashioned charm and you can make a good blend between mundane things and more complicated figures of speech.
6/26/2009 c1 189oxytocin
From what I've read of your writing, I can see you have the real makings of a songwriter. Sometimes songwriting and poetry intertwine, and sometimes they don't - sometimes it's obvious with your writing what should be a song and not a poem, and sometimes it isn't. I really like this piece - the motif of 'scarlet willow' is poetic and informative, and you don't overuse it. My favourite line is either the Jack Frost one (so random and yet so perfect!) or the onomatopoeia of cars 'hissing' (it's such a wonderful description).
189oxytocinFrom what I've read of your writing, I can see you have the real makings of a songwriter. Sometimes songwriting and poetry intertwine, and sometimes they don't - sometimes it's obvious with your writing what should be a song and not a poem, and sometimes it isn't. I really like this piece - the motif of 'scarlet willow' is poetic and informative, and you don't overuse it. My favourite line is either the Jack Frost one (so random and yet so perfect!) or the onomatopoeia of cars 'hissing' (it's such a wonderful description).
4/17/2008 c1 149McKinley Cooper
It feels like a moment frozen in time. You have a rhythm that reminds me of Leonard Cohen-know him? (some writers don't like to be compared, but that is an extreme compliment)
I'm off to read more of your writing, Thank you again-I hope we can talk more. If you like, I'd love to talk about the way you become inspired and your creative process.
You can reach me at if you'd ever like to talk.
Have a wonderful day/night-what time is it there?
149McKinley CooperIt feels like a moment frozen in time. You have a rhythm that reminds me of Leonard Cohen-know him? (some writers don't like to be compared, but that is an extreme compliment)
I'm off to read more of your writing, Thank you again-I hope we can talk more. If you like, I'd love to talk about the way you become inspired and your creative process.
You can reach me at if you'd ever like to talk.
Have a wonderful day/night-what time is it there?
3/25/2008 c1 1Gemma Lovell
Wow. This is really, really good. In the second line- did you say "the Band" on purpose because of Bob Dylan? If you did, I got it, and if not, nevermind. But let me say this: BOB DYLAN = LOVE. The man is a genius on several levels. He's one of the greatest American musicians to grace the humble ears of 21st century kids like us. And hence concludes my ramble about the wonder that is Bob Dylan. (You should check out his son's band the Wallflowers if you haven't, they're really good). Back to the song- I don't really like "I see Jack Frost in the debris". Maybe it's becasue Jack Frost isn't really a person or a specific personification, but I don't think it works. In the line below it, you've got a typo (the first "His" should be something else). For whatever reason, this also reminds me of the song "Blackbird" by the Beatles. No idea why. Great GREAT job on this one!
Love, Gemma
1Gemma LovellWow. This is really, really good. In the second line- did you say "the Band" on purpose because of Bob Dylan? If you did, I got it, and if not, nevermind. But let me say this: BOB DYLAN = LOVE. The man is a genius on several levels. He's one of the greatest American musicians to grace the humble ears of 21st century kids like us. And hence concludes my ramble about the wonder that is Bob Dylan. (You should check out his son's band the Wallflowers if you haven't, they're really good). Back to the song- I don't really like "I see Jack Frost in the debris". Maybe it's becasue Jack Frost isn't really a person or a specific personification, but I don't think it works. In the line below it, you've got a typo (the first "His" should be something else). For whatever reason, this also reminds me of the song "Blackbird" by the Beatles. No idea why. Great GREAT job on this one!
Love, Gemma