for One Last Goodbye3/26/2008 c1 
4vaudeville summers
The imagery is wonderful in the first few stanzas and I like the language you use..."The screen flashes with the versus of your disdain and hatred used to write my name into your poem."
Very nice.
Hmm. In the third to last stanza, you wrote "Id" instead of "I'd" and in the second to last, you wrote "Its" instead of "It's" but those are the only problems I noticed.
~DeAnna^^
4vaudeville summersThe imagery is wonderful in the first few stanzas and I like the language you use..."The screen flashes with the versus of your disdain and hatred used to write my name into your poem."
Very nice.
Hmm. In the third to last stanza, you wrote "Id" instead of "I'd" and in the second to last, you wrote "Its" instead of "It's" but those are the only problems I noticed.
~DeAnna^^