for May8/27/2009 c17 Shane
hi
now, i dont know how to start, i suck at intros and starting thingz off, and i suck at really expressing myself so blah, i try anywayz, anyway i usually dont get that into story'z, but i really do have an interest in your guyz storyz so u gotta feel special and proud of that! i really did love reading thiz, quite a comedic (iz that a word?) story with humor that kept me entertain az well az it still had a meaning and serious-ness to it and i rly liked it, i love may lol her personality and everything, dont know why other'z dun like her much just me i guess o.o, the creativity of thiz story iz awesome, never really read or heard or seen nothing like it before, the uniqueness was great, az silly az it got lol it still waz a great well put story and all the characters had weird but intersting personalityz that i found pretty nice^^ the story and the characterz tho still had thingz that we could all relate to, i know people just like some of the people in the story az well az i been in or dealed wid situationz sorta the same, so i liked i could rly relate to the story in some aspectz, overall it waz just entertaining, y'all are pretty creative with wat u do, you'z deffinatly got potential and should keep writing and dont think just cuz a couple bad reviewz or u get writerz block that u should ever give up^^
i'll shutup now, i talk too much, keep up the great writing, i'ma revew more az im already reading some more of your work and really liking it now az well, keep writing people =) bye bye
hi
now, i dont know how to start, i suck at intros and starting thingz off, and i suck at really expressing myself so blah, i try anywayz, anyway i usually dont get that into story'z, but i really do have an interest in your guyz storyz so u gotta feel special and proud of that! i really did love reading thiz, quite a comedic (iz that a word?) story with humor that kept me entertain az well az it still had a meaning and serious-ness to it and i rly liked it, i love may lol her personality and everything, dont know why other'z dun like her much just me i guess o.o, the creativity of thiz story iz awesome, never really read or heard or seen nothing like it before, the uniqueness was great, az silly az it got lol it still waz a great well put story and all the characters had weird but intersting personalityz that i found pretty nice^^ the story and the characterz tho still had thingz that we could all relate to, i know people just like some of the people in the story az well az i been in or dealed wid situationz sorta the same, so i liked i could rly relate to the story in some aspectz, overall it waz just entertaining, y'all are pretty creative with wat u do, you'z deffinatly got potential and should keep writing and dont think just cuz a couple bad reviewz or u get writerz block that u should ever give up^^
i'll shutup now, i talk too much, keep up the great writing, i'ma revew more az im already reading some more of your work and really liking it now az well, keep writing people =) bye bye
2/1/2009 c17 ImAVampire
Wow i haven't been here in the longest time eh. But you guys have done ALOT. i have alot of reading and ALOT of catching up to do xD
Wow i haven't been here in the longest time eh. But you guys have done ALOT. i have alot of reading and ALOT of catching up to do xD
11/22/2008 c17 Joe
For the 3rd time... XD
I hate you people. Lol, no I don't.
Random. Funny. Awesome. ^^ (Yes, I couldn't think of anything to say. Sue me.
Lol, plz don't. XD)
z0mg. Clown. And Writer's Block.
For the 3rd time... XD
I hate you people. Lol, no I don't.
Random. Funny. Awesome. ^^ (Yes, I couldn't think of anything to say. Sue me.
Lol, plz don't. XD)
z0mg. Clown. And Writer's Block.
10/26/2008 c17 
6HighwaytoInsanity.xx
Heyy I've just finished reading it and it was amazing! You guys are really good! I'm gonna read the sequel now!
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6HighwaytoInsanity.xxHeyy I've just finished reading it and it was amazing! You guys are really good! I'm gonna read the sequel now!
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Elz
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7/30/2008 c1 Lover of Sleep
okay, I was too lazy to sign in. And ooh! I'm so happy you guys updated =P
And I was reading the other reviews and I couldn't help but notice what the R.. something dude wrote. Ermm, okay, first of all, congratulations, you just wasted five minutes of your boring life to review on a story you didn't even like. Not very smart. If you didn't like the story, then you click the litle back button on the top left corner on the screen, and go read a different one that you like. Problem solved.
Uwahh, you made it seem like the kids are like in high school XD
Awesome. Update soon!
okay, I was too lazy to sign in. And ooh! I'm so happy you guys updated =P
And I was reading the other reviews and I couldn't help but notice what the R.. something dude wrote. Ermm, okay, first of all, congratulations, you just wasted five minutes of your boring life to review on a story you didn't even like. Not very smart. If you didn't like the story, then you click the litle back button on the top left corner on the screen, and go read a different one that you like. Problem solved.
Uwahh, you made it seem like the kids are like in high school XD
Awesome. Update soon!
7/25/2008 c13 NYOB
Ok, first of all, before I say anything else, I have a message to the person under me. Rameez whatever. First of all, get a life, ok? Who cares if it's not realisitc, because if you haven't noticed, the site's called FICTIONPRESS. Hence the story. FICTION. First of all, before you try to review anything, I suggest you learn how to read instead of wasting your time trashing a story that have more talent in their foot that you will ever have in a lifetime. People like you piss me off. Don't review if you have nothing to contribute cuz listen up, kid, before you review someone else's piece of work, I suggest you review you're own writing.
Sorry for ranting. Anyways, I LIKE the story. Nice job.
Ok, first of all, before I say anything else, I have a message to the person under me. Rameez whatever. First of all, get a life, ok? Who cares if it's not realisitc, because if you haven't noticed, the site's called FICTIONPRESS. Hence the story. FICTION. First of all, before you try to review anything, I suggest you learn how to read instead of wasting your time trashing a story that have more talent in their foot that you will ever have in a lifetime. People like you piss me off. Don't review if you have nothing to contribute cuz listen up, kid, before you review someone else's piece of work, I suggest you review you're own writing.
Sorry for ranting. Anyways, I LIKE the story. Nice job.
7/24/2008 c1 Rameez Hussain
Well , it's pretty good until I found myself bored of death after the first two paragraphs! Like this story sucks , a girl who lives in a closet and runs away from an orphanage . That's pathetic and unrealistic. Go fix this whole thing. I cant believe you weren't bored to death by writing the story . I was shocked to see you could bear to write a chapter, and then I see you wrote TWELVE! You may have skills in withstanding boredom but no skills at all in writing.
Well , it's pretty good until I found myself bored of death after the first two paragraphs! Like this story sucks , a girl who lives in a closet and runs away from an orphanage . That's pathetic and unrealistic. Go fix this whole thing. I cant believe you weren't bored to death by writing the story . I was shocked to see you could bear to write a chapter, and then I see you wrote TWELVE! You may have skills in withstanding boredom but no skills at all in writing.
7/8/2008 c13 2Gurdian Dream
Another amusing chapter. I love the Anime con. though I kept thinking of them as teens or something.
Anyway, writing is definately getting better but you should maybe read your chapter over to get rid of a few mistakes (I know everyone's a critic ^.^U). I do the exact same thing but I'm learning to do without.
All in all, it's pretty good and pretty funny if not a little childishly random but then againt these kids are like ( I forgot their age. Haha. Woops)
2Gurdian DreamAnother amusing chapter. I love the Anime con. though I kept thinking of them as teens or something.
Anyway, writing is definately getting better but you should maybe read your chapter over to get rid of a few mistakes (I know everyone's a critic ^.^U). I do the exact same thing but I'm learning to do without.
All in all, it's pretty good and pretty funny if not a little childishly random but then againt these kids are like ( I forgot their age. Haha. Woops)
5/11/2008 c11 usuallyme
I totally agree with Smileymiley248 XD, don't u think so anjali and monica? I think Joe should go with may or monica, just because...
I totally agree with Smileymiley248 XD, don't u think so anjali and monica? I think Joe should go with may or monica, just because...
5/3/2008 c11 9Cheese Addicts
lol, we'll see about that Annie! MONICA WILL PROTECT ME =D or not o_o And to answer your question smileymiley, like we said before, most of our stories have no plot xD But the second book we're writing currently, the high school version of May, sort of has a plot o.o And for the hook up thing with Joe, do you mean May or Mimi?
9Cheese Addictslol, we'll see about that Annie! MONICA WILL PROTECT ME =D or not o_o And to answer your question smileymiley, like we said before, most of our stories have no plot xD But the second book we're writing currently, the high school version of May, sort of has a plot o.o And for the hook up thing with Joe, do you mean May or Mimi?
5/3/2008 c11 1Crazy colorz
Cool story but whats the point? I still realy like that story have may and joe hook up! lol good luck on the story!XD
1Crazy colorzCool story but whats the point? I still realy like that story have may and joe hook up! lol good luck on the story!XD
5/2/2008 c11 ImAVampire
Except annie...? ..oh i will rmember dat one dai in skool... watch u will feel my wrath.. xD I read chapter 10 and it freaked me out as it was before i found out it was a dream =0 lol. I read some of chpater 11 den i didnt understand it and i got pissed so imma w8 for chapter 12. Arent u happy dat i reviewed, i deserve a cookie =) and i deserve u to update more
Except annie...? ..oh i will rmember dat one dai in skool... watch u will feel my wrath.. xD I read chapter 10 and it freaked me out as it was before i found out it was a dream =0 lol. I read some of chpater 11 den i didnt understand it and i got pissed so imma w8 for chapter 12. Arent u happy dat i reviewed, i deserve a cookie =) and i deserve u to update more
4/30/2008 c11 2Gurdian Dream
Not much time to review but that was adorable. I love the Kodacha connections. Man I love that series! Hahaha, Joe is really amusing...for an old man. XD Update soon!
2Gurdian DreamNot much time to review but that was adorable. I love the Kodacha connections. Man I love that series! Hahaha, Joe is really amusing...for an old man. XD Update soon!