for Wait What?11/18/2008 c7 
1checkyesdana
this is so god.
please update more often. i love these kinds of plots. they make my heart ache is the best kind of wayy
1checkyesdanathis is so god.
please update more often. i love these kinds of plots. they make my heart ache is the best kind of wayy
11/13/2008 c7 Kalypsopurple
DO NOT abandon this story! Also, don't try to change personalities midway, please.
Don't fall into that common trap of making it sappy as hell as the end draws near. That will kill a good story faster than lightning on dry wood. Trust me.
And stay with the muse :)
DO NOT abandon this story! Also, don't try to change personalities midway, please.
Don't fall into that common trap of making it sappy as hell as the end draws near. That will kill a good story faster than lightning on dry wood. Trust me.
And stay with the muse :)
11/13/2008 c6 Kalypsopurple
Okay. This is driving me slightly crazy. I'm beginning to like Dom! Build the suspense girl, its working in your favour ;)
Okay. This is driving me slightly crazy. I'm beginning to like Dom! Build the suspense girl, its working in your favour ;)
11/13/2008 c5 Kalypsopurple
Okay.
Absolutely fab chapter.
Tantalising.
That's the best word I can come up with. Is it Dom or Cole? You're not telling! And I love that!
Okay.
Absolutely fab chapter.
Tantalising.
That's the best word I can come up with. Is it Dom or Cole? You're not telling! And I love that!
11/13/2008 c3 Kalypsopurple
Gosh! You improve with every chapter! I really really liked this one! I'm going to subscribe to it :D
Gosh! You improve with every chapter! I really really liked this one! I'm going to subscribe to it :D
11/13/2008 c1 Kalypsopurple
Okay. Not bad to start with. Has potential.
But waay to much time and unnecessary words spent on describing your characters. It was very very boring! A word of advice, develop your character through the way they speak, the way they react to things and the way others react to them. Its much more sophisticated and interesting than bland description. If you must describe, shorten it, and make it interesting! Not predictable and seemingly without purpose...
Lets see what happens in the next chapter...
Okay. Not bad to start with. Has potential.
But waay to much time and unnecessary words spent on describing your characters. It was very very boring! A word of advice, develop your character through the way they speak, the way they react to things and the way others react to them. Its much more sophisticated and interesting than bland description. If you must describe, shorten it, and make it interesting! Not predictable and seemingly without purpose...
Lets see what happens in the next chapter...
11/11/2008 c7 Molly
okay, first of all, I LOVE YOUR STORY!
But i also love Cole, and if she ends up with Dom...I think I might cry. Seriously, somethings going on and I know Cole loves her...just please make them end up together! Update quickly pleaasse!
-Molly Rose
okay, first of all, I LOVE YOUR STORY!
But i also love Cole, and if she ends up with Dom...I think I might cry. Seriously, somethings going on and I know Cole loves her...just please make them end up together! Update quickly pleaasse!
-Molly Rose
11/11/2008 c7 WriterGurl123
Cole is being an ass right now. Sure he kissed Lexie and that's weird, but they've been friends for years and he can't even talk to her. I'm happy that Lexie found Dom, so she could get her mind off of stupid Cole.
Love it!
Cole is being an ass right now. Sure he kissed Lexie and that's weird, but they've been friends for years and he can't even talk to her. I'm happy that Lexie found Dom, so she could get her mind off of stupid Cole.
Love it!
11/11/2008 c7 Grenna-Chae
Wow, this is really good, and I enjoyed the spanish portion (i understood it all). just a few things with grammer, like words and stuff, but thats it.
update soon!
Wow, this is really good, and I enjoyed the spanish portion (i understood it all). just a few things with grammer, like words and stuff, but thats it.
update soon!
11/11/2008 c7 simpleehapa
Ahh, I love this story. I'm really excited to see how this goes. Oh, anticipation =]
Ahh, I love this story. I'm really excited to see how this goes. Oh, anticipation =]
11/11/2008 c7 5Roxyyyy
more more more more MORE! post more please! This is amazing! I LOVE THIS STORYY!
5Roxyyyymore more more more MORE! post more please! This is amazing! I LOVE THIS STORYY!
9/23/2008 c6 18Aoide Mnemosyne
Yay a new chapter! This one is great ^.^. I actually quite like the way Dom has turned out.
You make Cole and Lexi's situation very real, and that's what makes the story great!
As ever, Lexi is AWESOME. I, too, am a tomboy and really the only girly-ish thing I do is grow out my nails mwa hahaha :).
I can't wait for more chapters! (Give me a few days and I'll have ideas for you, lol)
~Sophia
18Aoide MnemosyneYay a new chapter! This one is great ^.^. I actually quite like the way Dom has turned out.
You make Cole and Lexi's situation very real, and that's what makes the story great!
As ever, Lexi is AWESOME. I, too, am a tomboy and really the only girly-ish thing I do is grow out my nails mwa hahaha :).
I can't wait for more chapters! (Give me a few days and I'll have ideas for you, lol)
~Sophia