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10/1/2009 c1 9Narq
This is very powerful, you talk about doctors abusing their power I guess, and it is true. Some doctors do do that and get away with it.

I like the way you almost tell a story.

Something you could improve on is the formatting. Try having stanzas. If you have shift-enter you get single lines; only enter and you get double lines. Try it!

Narq.
5/28/2008 c1 25destinee's notebook
I guess when your body's been tied down, the only way you can live free is inside yourself.
4/12/2008 c1 119Ezio. The Sentinel
Hmm...makes one wonder who is the more sick, the doctor or the patient? I suppose people will always feel as though they have the right to decide the fates of others...Great poem; whether you purposefully outlined a major folly in human nature or not, this definitely made me take a moment and reflect on society as a whole. Excellent!

No worries,

Thermite
4/10/2008 c1 13Rach.Liefde
Very strange.

vivid... and yet well written.

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