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6/15/2012 c1 4Ibbit
Wah. What a paragraph that was. Characters don't usually have detail like that. Though, I guess it was needed for something like this. There are a few misspelled words and grammar issues, but otherwise this is a cute little short. Good job.

Luck with writing and such. ibbit:]
5/9/2009 c1 9Arkadian Toad
This was amazingly adorable!

Your descriptions of the two boys were really well done. I could seriously picture them!

...Tannis is kinda a creeper XD In a GOOD way. I'm sure Brandon likes him for that.
8/1/2008 c1 ra
this sort of really needs a lot of improvement. like, a LOT, and right away. it lacks flow and everything. the punctuation is wrong. you sound like you're trying to write a romantic and/or sexy story but EPIC FAIL, okay.
5/5/2008 c1 3Primal Ghost
I enjoyed this very much.

Although you made countless grammatical mistakes, the characters seemed very alive to me. It'd help to have descriptions, but otherwise, bravo!

I see this happen in school, all the time. ;)
4/10/2008 c1 3ilcocoabean
LOLS. That was cute.
4/7/2008 c1 calamity jane
This is really good. The dialogue is funny and realistic and the reader gets a good sense of each boys uncertainty and embarressment. I wish you'd continue their story, I'd like to know what happens next. Watch your spelling and grammar...otherwise great job!
4/7/2008 c1 deviltakeyou
yay!i'm ur first review!hahaha.different.in a nice kind of way.i like Tannis!"will u hv sex with me?" major LOL there.write more.:)

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