
12/21/2008 c1
1TheEntertainer26
LOLburgerism - there was nothing flawed about that! What a great story! I rarely laugh but here we have some 5 star comedy. By the by, I think their names are great.
~TheEntertainer26

LOLburgerism - there was nothing flawed about that! What a great story! I rarely laugh but here we have some 5 star comedy. By the by, I think their names are great.
~TheEntertainer26
6/26/2008 c1
21Reaper
That was quite possibly the stupidest, cliched, and best thing I have ever read. Request moar!
~Reaper

That was quite possibly the stupidest, cliched, and best thing I have ever read. Request moar!
~Reaper
5/20/2008 c1
8Rainbow Pineapple
Okay, then. That was weird! And funny! Well, come to think of it, most weird stuff is funny, and most funny stoff is weird, so... GAH! I'M GETTING OFF TOPIC! THIS HAPPENS WITH BASICALLY ALL OF THE STORIES I REVIEW!
lol, I like how hero was named 'Handosome Hero'. It's a total cliche to have heros be handsome, lol. Except of course Batman, he is in no way handsome and... GRR! WHY DO I ALWAYS GET OFF TOPIC?
Anyway, this was funny! I'd lie to read more by you!

Okay, then. That was weird! And funny! Well, come to think of it, most weird stuff is funny, and most funny stoff is weird, so... GAH! I'M GETTING OFF TOPIC! THIS HAPPENS WITH BASICALLY ALL OF THE STORIES I REVIEW!
lol, I like how hero was named 'Handosome Hero'. It's a total cliche to have heros be handsome, lol. Except of course Batman, he is in no way handsome and... GRR! WHY DO I ALWAYS GET OFF TOPIC?
Anyway, this was funny! I'd lie to read more by you!
5/9/2008 c1 dinodaw
hm it was it was good but I found one thing but I think you fixed that anywho you need to write a another story not a handsome hero story something else
dinodaw
hm it was it was good but I found one thing but I think you fixed that anywho you need to write a another story not a handsome hero story something else
dinodaw
5/3/2008 c1
6Ms. Critic
Ah, you kept to my guidelines (tear) I'm so proud! Keep writing I'm finding some great potential here. And I read your profile. Am I really that morbid?

Ah, you kept to my guidelines (tear) I'm so proud! Keep writing I'm finding some great potential here. And I read your profile. Am I really that morbid?
4/11/2008 c1
15blackberrydream
Wow. That was hilarious! Everything was so...cleverly named. The joke about the father was surprisingly funny considering that's kind of overused but you put a nice twist on it and the "Do you have any idea how expensive funerals are!" Was the best line ever! Great job!
-blackberrydream

Wow. That was hilarious! Everything was so...cleverly named. The joke about the father was surprisingly funny considering that's kind of overused but you put a nice twist on it and the "Do you have any idea how expensive funerals are!" Was the best line ever! Great job!
-blackberrydream
4/11/2008 c1 The.Wizard.Pen.Dragon
That was REALLY good! I'm SO glad that you posted it! and I only saw one error in the entire thing and that was in the 9th paragraph from the end you used the wrong "to' it should have been "They soon got too close, and with a flip, ...", but that's probably the best of any story I've read in a long time! And although in some part (the begining especially) the humor was a tiny bit too sparse, it turned out to be HILARIOUS at the end and endings are really the most important part! So overall, GOOD JOB!
Write on!
Pen.Dragon
That was REALLY good! I'm SO glad that you posted it! and I only saw one error in the entire thing and that was in the 9th paragraph from the end you used the wrong "to' it should have been "They soon got too close, and with a flip, ...", but that's probably the best of any story I've read in a long time! And although in some part (the begining especially) the humor was a tiny bit too sparse, it turned out to be HILARIOUS at the end and endings are really the most important part! So overall, GOOD JOB!
Write on!
Pen.Dragon
4/7/2008 c1
8R.E.D. the animator
LOL! That's much funnier than other stories on FP. My favorite part was where The Evil One fell only ten feet down.

LOL! That's much funnier than other stories on FP. My favorite part was where The Evil One fell only ten feet down.