for Faith4/20/2008 c3 
11Tecna
You have a sad theme throughout the fic, let me tell you now if you turn this into a tragedy, I swear to you I won't read or review, you know I hate tragedies!
Other than that I love the following lines: “Shut up. I’m just feeling a little hot.”
“And who wouldn’t? With my cousin flattering you, you’re bound to feel a little gorgeous,” quirks Chezelle.
They were great, lol! Also, that was quite harsh that she got a slap, but her comeback was well delivered.
Enjoyed it, although you did make me a little sad, you annoying dodo! Oh, and what line of mine did you use... the friendship/enemy one? Nah don't mind, oh and thanx... you'll get your just deserts yet, you wait.
Tecna ;)
11TecnaYou have a sad theme throughout the fic, let me tell you now if you turn this into a tragedy, I swear to you I won't read or review, you know I hate tragedies!
Other than that I love the following lines: “Shut up. I’m just feeling a little hot.”
“And who wouldn’t? With my cousin flattering you, you’re bound to feel a little gorgeous,” quirks Chezelle.
They were great, lol! Also, that was quite harsh that she got a slap, but her comeback was well delivered.
Enjoyed it, although you did make me a little sad, you annoying dodo! Oh, and what line of mine did you use... the friendship/enemy one? Nah don't mind, oh and thanx... you'll get your just deserts yet, you wait.
Tecna ;)
4/17/2008 c3 CRAZYSTAR0
Oi! Good story :D:D:D i LOVE it... and the chapters good too :) I like the names u gave ure characters - there all kinda unique..BTW, about ure summary... i think you should change the number 17 to 'late teens' or something so its not so specific... it'l be vague and i think it would kinda make pople wanna read it :D:D .. BTW, which quote did fish give?
Oi! Good story :D:D:D i LOVE it... and the chapters good too :) I like the names u gave ure characters - there all kinda unique..BTW, about ure summary... i think you should change the number 17 to 'late teens' or something so its not so specific... it'l be vague and i think it would kinda make pople wanna read it :D:D .. BTW, which quote did fish give?
4/14/2008 c2 crazystar0
Hey! This is a BRILLIANT story! why havent u got anymore reviews?
BTW, i read both chapters.. first chapter nearly made me cry :( :( AND im in study center...oh well... Im gonna be adding it to fravourites as soon as i feel like signing in :D
BUT I WANT AN UPDATE SOON! And i agree with Tech - DONT U DARE KILL HER OFF... or else...
Hey! This is a BRILLIANT story! why havent u got anymore reviews?
BTW, i read both chapters.. first chapter nearly made me cry :( :( AND im in study center...oh well... Im gonna be adding it to fravourites as soon as i feel like signing in :D
BUT I WANT AN UPDATE SOON! And i agree with Tech - DONT U DARE KILL HER OFF... or else...
4/10/2008 c2 Tecna
That was a brill chapter, it's written well and it flows smoothly throughout. The flow of the converstaion is well written, enjoyed the way they interracted and their company of each other.
However, there is one mistake I must point out. In your summary you mentioned she meets Zeeke when she turns 16, however in this chapter she's 17. May wanna alter the summary a little.
Other than that the chapter was brilliant, and I love Zeeke's character. Oh btw, if you kill off Faith, I'm going to come after you, I hope you know... other than that I won't talk to you, I'm beng serious!
Update soon!
Tecna ;)
That was a brill chapter, it's written well and it flows smoothly throughout. The flow of the converstaion is well written, enjoyed the way they interracted and their company of each other.
However, there is one mistake I must point out. In your summary you mentioned she meets Zeeke when she turns 16, however in this chapter she's 17. May wanna alter the summary a little.
Other than that the chapter was brilliant, and I love Zeeke's character. Oh btw, if you kill off Faith, I'm going to come after you, I hope you know... other than that I won't talk to you, I'm beng serious!
Update soon!
Tecna ;)
4/8/2008 c1 Breeze x0
This is really good so far, but you might want to explain what 'TB' is because not everybody will know what it means. :)
This is really good so far, but you might want to explain what 'TB' is because not everybody will know what it means. :)
4/8/2008 c1 Tecna
That is so heavy to the heart. It's a great start and it's well written, your summary sounds interesting and also promising. I'm looking forward to reading more. Their relationship is well portrayed, along with their characters. It's deep for a first chapter, yet it's great. Do update soon.
Tecna ;)
That is so heavy to the heart. It's a great start and it's well written, your summary sounds interesting and also promising. I'm looking forward to reading more. Their relationship is well portrayed, along with their characters. It's deep for a first chapter, yet it's great. Do update soon.
Tecna ;)