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4/19/2008 c1 103Jesse the Storyteller
I like the last two lines - they aren't what you would expect.

I also like the imagery of "inscribed on his sheath and skin" and also "uniquely feathered details".

I don't really understand, though, since you said this is describing a tatoo... how it's a prize? "A Knight concealing a prize of power".


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4/13/2008 c1 71MidnightStar005
I just added this one to my C2. I really love it.

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4/9/2008 c1 65Nemonus
I like this for "Marking everything the Knight is not", which gives him a depth of character unseen elsewhere in the descriptions which glow with praise. The rhymth's a little stiff but only practice assuages that. The character sounds interesting from the little I've gotten here.

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