for Used and abused a new life?
19/18/2008 c1 Pea-Carrots
Ilove this chapter its so like a fairytale in real life. You are such an awsome writer. You should continue.
Ilove this chapter its so like a fairytale in real life. You are such an awsome writer. You should continue.
4/27/2008 c2 Dakota.347
Ok as critism your grammar and spelling was a bit off in some places. but i loved the beginning really captured me. keep posting.
dakota
Ok as critism your grammar and spelling was a bit off in some places. but i loved the beginning really captured me. keep posting.
dakota
4/9/2008 c1 Blank Pages
I really like what you're going for here, but I'd recommend a really thorough clean up of the story and summary. I would stay away from "u" as a replacement for "you", and a lot of your grammar was off. For some reason, in the last few paragraphs, you left out "I" a lot, and made numerous mistakes. Before that it was pretty good.
Anyway, I'm just recommending a good spelling/grammar check, maybe a beta, you know.
I hope you'll take my words as advice, and not insults... Thank you.
-Blank Pages
I really like what you're going for here, but I'd recommend a really thorough clean up of the story and summary. I would stay away from "u" as a replacement for "you", and a lot of your grammar was off. For some reason, in the last few paragraphs, you left out "I" a lot, and made numerous mistakes. Before that it was pretty good.
Anyway, I'm just recommending a good spelling/grammar check, maybe a beta, you know.
I hope you'll take my words as advice, and not insults... Thank you.
-Blank Pages