for Matched6/18/2012 c19 Cortney
Started reading the first chapter and couldn't stop until I got to the end. Loved it! The kiss scenes were hot, the chemistry between the characters was great, and you did a masterful job interweaving in the mystery.
It's a shame more people haven't reviewed this!
Started reading the first chapter and couldn't stop until I got to the end. Loved it! The kiss scenes were hot, the chemistry between the characters was great, and you did a masterful job interweaving in the mystery.
It's a shame more people haven't reviewed this!
5/29/2012 c19 heart song
Awome!
one of my favorite stories will you do a equal for them that they have a kid or something
anyway thanks for writing it
Awome!
one of my favorite stories will you do a equal for them that they have a kid or something
anyway thanks for writing it
11/4/2011 c1 witeaya
really good read.imo, claire being the bad 'guy' was quiet obvious.what i didnt expect was charity to actually involved.
really good read.imo, claire being the bad 'guy' was quiet obvious.what i didnt expect was charity to actually involved.
7/23/2010 c19 
2Abrasive
Great story, truly. It was suspenseful and clever,and demonstrated clear planning with regards to plot. The writing was clear and accessible and the dialogue didn't feel stilted.
Furthermore, your characterisation was wonderful, particularly with regards to Jackie - her emotions and intentions were so well-evoked they were almost tangible. And the chemistry between Jackie and Kyle was, well, hot, to say the least.
There were very few grammatica errors which could be easily fixed with some thorough editing. Aside from that, some more attention to detail and description (of things other than action) would be appreciated, however, it's still a good read as it is.
Smiley face.
2AbrasiveGreat story, truly. It was suspenseful and clever,and demonstrated clear planning with regards to plot. The writing was clear and accessible and the dialogue didn't feel stilted.
Furthermore, your characterisation was wonderful, particularly with regards to Jackie - her emotions and intentions were so well-evoked they were almost tangible. And the chemistry between Jackie and Kyle was, well, hot, to say the least.
There were very few grammatica errors which could be easily fixed with some thorough editing. Aside from that, some more attention to detail and description (of things other than action) would be appreciated, however, it's still a good read as it is.
Smiley face.
7/13/2010 c19 2Dancer.In.The.Rain
This story was really good...I enjoyed reading it and I couldnt stop reading it
2Dancer.In.The.RainThis story was really good...I enjoyed reading it and I couldnt stop reading it
11/6/2009 c19 4jammi
This story was brilliant though near the end Mike seems to accept the match but we never get to see it which is strange to me since you made a point to have him comment in an earlier chapter that he'd just have to step his game up even if they were matched.
He just seemed so intent on getting her in the beginning, feeling jealous/overreacting to things, etc. then it becomes a nonissue, which felt weird to me.
I love your writing style and the insecurity we get off of Jackie, it was real and there were only a few times she irritated me [when she got upset with him because he needed distance to keep her safe. But she came to her senses soon enough].
Her family however I do not like them and I will not like them. A mother willing to stand by as her daughter is hurt by her sister makes her a horrible mother. Treating the daughter who stays with you like garbage and the other as the golden child? Also not cute.
And I found her interest in putting Jackie and Mike together another way for her to control him, since Mike is already settled in the town and wouldn't leave.
And I think manipulating someone's mind the way Carly does should be reason to go to jail. i mention it with other stories as well but that's the biggest invasion in my mind, the fact that you just take it upon yourself to take away someone's will? That's just as bad as putting them in a cage and making them turn feral.
I don't know, lol, I really enjoyed this story but I felt certain things were glossed over that I probably think are a big deal just because of my point of view on free will. And I'm a spiteful person who doesn't forgive and forget, LOL.
The fact that Jackie is able too is great and meshes well with the character you've set up for her and I enjoyed the world you had created. A lot.
One question though, the state/town, how big is it? because Kyle says it's like its own state but then they refer to it in a way that makes me think small town. So is it like Hawaii in that sense? And if you don't know about it, would you drive on by? but since you do know about it, you can enter? That's the feel I was getting.
4jammiThis story was brilliant though near the end Mike seems to accept the match but we never get to see it which is strange to me since you made a point to have him comment in an earlier chapter that he'd just have to step his game up even if they were matched.
He just seemed so intent on getting her in the beginning, feeling jealous/overreacting to things, etc. then it becomes a nonissue, which felt weird to me.
I love your writing style and the insecurity we get off of Jackie, it was real and there were only a few times she irritated me [when she got upset with him because he needed distance to keep her safe. But she came to her senses soon enough].
Her family however I do not like them and I will not like them. A mother willing to stand by as her daughter is hurt by her sister makes her a horrible mother. Treating the daughter who stays with you like garbage and the other as the golden child? Also not cute.
And I found her interest in putting Jackie and Mike together another way for her to control him, since Mike is already settled in the town and wouldn't leave.
And I think manipulating someone's mind the way Carly does should be reason to go to jail. i mention it with other stories as well but that's the biggest invasion in my mind, the fact that you just take it upon yourself to take away someone's will? That's just as bad as putting them in a cage and making them turn feral.
I don't know, lol, I really enjoyed this story but I felt certain things were glossed over that I probably think are a big deal just because of my point of view on free will. And I'm a spiteful person who doesn't forgive and forget, LOL.
The fact that Jackie is able too is great and meshes well with the character you've set up for her and I enjoyed the world you had created. A lot.
One question though, the state/town, how big is it? because Kyle says it's like its own state but then they refer to it in a way that makes me think small town. So is it like Hawaii in that sense? And if you don't know about it, would you drive on by? but since you do know about it, you can enter? That's the feel I was getting.
7/6/2009 c19 reader
For some reason, I wrote a review for this chapter already and it got deleted...
Anyway, just wanted to say it was really impressive of you to bring in so many characters from the other stories...you _really_ had to have everyone's history and personalities planned out well...it was amazing!
For some reason, I wrote a review for this chapter already and it got deleted...
Anyway, just wanted to say it was really impressive of you to bring in so many characters from the other stories...you _really_ had to have everyone's history and personalities planned out well...it was amazing!
7/6/2009 c16 reader
Hm, I'm starting to think that it might not be Charity! o_O
Hm, I'm starting to think that it might not be Charity! o_O