for Obsession4/19/2008 c1 
22PhoenixPhilosophy
read my poem "journal entry." I'm not telling you this so you can review it or just so i get a reader [although if you do, that's quite welcome] but because your poem is basically the same as mine. it's the same EXACT topic, except in your poem, something had actually happened with the narrator and his/her crush. mine isn't. I like yours a lot. It reminds me of that experience. very much. great poem.
22PhoenixPhilosophyread my poem "journal entry." I'm not telling you this so you can review it or just so i get a reader [although if you do, that's quite welcome] but because your poem is basically the same as mine. it's the same EXACT topic, except in your poem, something had actually happened with the narrator and his/her crush. mine isn't. I like yours a lot. It reminds me of that experience. very much. great poem.
4/19/2008 c1 2dragonflydreamer
Reviewing for the Review Game's Review Marathon! (link in profile)
Wow, this is eerily similar to an event in my life, although I wouldn't go as far as to call it an "omsession."
I like how the the length of each line worked. They started long, there was one short one, then the rest were medium. I don't know if that was intentional, but it came out nice.I thought the transition from the narrator talking to herslf to asking the questions to the guy a little out of place. I think you should have stuck to one or the other, but maybe it's just me. You did pretty well with this overall!
2dragonflydreamerReviewing for the Review Game's Review Marathon! (link in profile)
Wow, this is eerily similar to an event in my life, although I wouldn't go as far as to call it an "omsession."
I like how the the length of each line worked. They started long, there was one short one, then the rest were medium. I don't know if that was intentional, but it came out nice.I thought the transition from the narrator talking to herslf to asking the questions to the guy a little out of place. I think you should have stuck to one or the other, but maybe it's just me. You did pretty well with this overall!