for RE: Suicide PostIt1/7/2009 c1 
140CostumeForAGutterball
wow-short, not sweet, but friggin powerful! I love the emotion in this!
140CostumeForAGutterballwow-short, not sweet, but friggin powerful! I love the emotion in this!
9/23/2008 c1 149McKinley Cooper
It stung...I hope it's fiction. I admire your reserve-the brevity say it so well.
Mckinley
149McKinley CooperIt stung...I hope it's fiction. I admire your reserve-the brevity say it so well.
Mckinley
7/21/2008 c1 Green Eyed Angel
Suicide Post-It? That's original. The whole thing made me laugh. Am I insane? Hopefully not. Short and sweet (SWEET? I don't know). Love it.
Suicide Post-It? That's original. The whole thing made me laugh. Am I insane? Hopefully not. Short and sweet (SWEET? I don't know). Love it.
5/8/2008 c1 5R. E. Ellison
I like the idea of a suicide note on a "Post-It". It smacks of the disassociated life we live these days, and still gets across (with irony) that there's a disconnect with emotions as a result, though the emotions it portrays are still genuine.
In "Cabaret" (the film) Sally laments that her father has sent her an apology in the form of a Western Union telegram - ten words, because they charge more after that. She says that if she came down with leprosy, she'd get a note: "SORRY KID TOUGH BREAK. SINCERELY HOPE NOSE DOESN'T FALL OFF."
Your poem is restricted by the same limitation: a "Post-It", which dictates the form and content, though you get a lot of mileage out of a very few words.
Nicely done!
R.E.
5R. E. EllisonI like the idea of a suicide note on a "Post-It". It smacks of the disassociated life we live these days, and still gets across (with irony) that there's a disconnect with emotions as a result, though the emotions it portrays are still genuine.
In "Cabaret" (the film) Sally laments that her father has sent her an apology in the form of a Western Union telegram - ten words, because they charge more after that. She says that if she came down with leprosy, she'd get a note: "SORRY KID TOUGH BREAK. SINCERELY HOPE NOSE DOESN'T FALL OFF."
Your poem is restricted by the same limitation: a "Post-It", which dictates the form and content, though you get a lot of mileage out of a very few words.
Nicely done!
R.E.
5/5/2008 c1 6asylum writer
My second RM prize for you...
The title and idea of this are original.
Am I supposed to want to laugh at the beginning? Maybe you intended it, or maybe I'm just morbid... But the narrator says it's blunt, and then the note says 'vacant body ready for use' so, yes, it's blunt. Is that the entire note? Maybe, because of the Post-It thing. But notazombie apparently laughed too, now that I read the other reviews. Well, whether the humor was intended or not, I liked it.
It was short, but I think it got to the point, so well done on saying it all in so few words.
6asylum writerMy second RM prize for you...
The title and idea of this are original.
Am I supposed to want to laugh at the beginning? Maybe you intended it, or maybe I'm just morbid... But the narrator says it's blunt, and then the note says 'vacant body ready for use' so, yes, it's blunt. Is that the entire note? Maybe, because of the Post-It thing. But notazombie apparently laughed too, now that I read the other reviews. Well, whether the humor was intended or not, I liked it.
It was short, but I think it got to the point, so well done on saying it all in so few words.
5/2/2008 c1 scarlet stars
Review Marathon Prize =]
I like that although this is a short poem, it gets the point across. Like the reviewer below, I felt that the feeling didn't get across. But, very nice title, and the idea is intriguing.
Review Marathon Prize =]
I like that although this is a short poem, it gets the point across. Like the reviewer below, I felt that the feeling didn't get across. But, very nice title, and the idea is intriguing.
4/26/2008 c1 5notazombie
I forgot to say "Review Marathon" in my other review, so have another :D
This is a very brief poem, but it gets the point -or at least, in theory. I understand what you're saying with the belated confession but the feeling doesn't get across (maybe because I haven't experienced this kind of thing myself). I feel like I should feel sad about it, but the first four lines are too distracting. Is "vacant body ready for use" his suicide note? I dunno. Something about the first part makes me laugh, and I'm pretty sure that it's not what you'd intended (since you did label it Tragedy/Angst).
I like it as a poem, but I don't think I like it for the reasons/in the way you'd intended. Sorry, especially if this is close to your heart :(
-NaZ
5notazombieI forgot to say "Review Marathon" in my other review, so have another :D
This is a very brief poem, but it gets the point -or at least, in theory. I understand what you're saying with the belated confession but the feeling doesn't get across (maybe because I haven't experienced this kind of thing myself). I feel like I should feel sad about it, but the first four lines are too distracting. Is "vacant body ready for use" his suicide note? I dunno. Something about the first part makes me laugh, and I'm pretty sure that it's not what you'd intended (since you did label it Tragedy/Angst).
I like it as a poem, but I don't think I like it for the reasons/in the way you'd intended. Sorry, especially if this is close to your heart :(
-NaZ
4/24/2008 c1 31writingxonxwalls
Wow, Very nice. I really really liked this first part "your sucicide note was / blunt, to say the least-" I don't know... I guess it just flowed really really well. Great job.
I also liked your vocabulary... haha, does that sound wierd? Well, words like blunt, and belated, and declaration. You know, instead of words that people could use that seem so common and ordinary.
Awesome job, I loved it.
-Brittany
31writingxonxwallsWow, Very nice. I really really liked this first part "your sucicide note was / blunt, to say the least-" I don't know... I guess it just flowed really really well. Great job.
I also liked your vocabulary... haha, does that sound wierd? Well, words like blunt, and belated, and declaration. You know, instead of words that people could use that seem so common and ordinary.
Awesome job, I loved it.
-Brittany
4/21/2008 c1 22PhoenixPhilosophy
My god. Brutal, to say the least. My heart feels like it's broken. And I can't breath. This is just so... wow. It's amazing how you can get so many emotions out of me with such a small amount of words.
You are truly brilliant.
Every word is perfectly placed, nothing is missing. the last 3 words just hurt. wow.
and the title- AMAZING.
wow.
22PhoenixPhilosophyMy god. Brutal, to say the least. My heart feels like it's broken. And I can't breath. This is just so... wow. It's amazing how you can get so many emotions out of me with such a small amount of words.
You are truly brilliant.
Every word is perfectly placed, nothing is missing. the last 3 words just hurt. wow.
and the title- AMAZING.
wow.
4/20/2008 c1 83the-foresight
I liked this, it has a strong voice and I like how it flows. It's not awkward at all really.
83the-foresightI liked this, it has a strong voice and I like how it flows. It's not awkward at all really.
4/20/2008 c1 59Tranquil Thorns
I agree with the original reviewer; I like the originality of this idea.
At first I thought this was supposed to be humorous (maybe in a twisted way) despite the subject manner, but I can sense the underlying sorrow there, especially in the last two lines.
A short but powerful poem nevertheless.
59Tranquil ThornsI agree with the original reviewer; I like the originality of this idea.
At first I thought this was supposed to be humorous (maybe in a twisted way) despite the subject manner, but I can sense the underlying sorrow there, especially in the last two lines.
A short but powerful poem nevertheless.
4/20/2008 c1 53Head or Tales
Oh God, that's a fairly good and original idea you had there... Short and perfect. Proud to be the first reviewer!
Thanks for reviewing my work.
V.
53Head or TalesOh God, that's a fairly good and original idea you had there... Short and perfect. Proud to be the first reviewer!
Thanks for reviewing my work.
V.