for Faces7/1/2012 c1 Guest
Good poem!
Good poem!
4/18/2009 c1 
56felicia13
This is a nice piece. I love the end. "and the only / remnant / of this harrowing event / is the gentle shaking / of my hands." Beautiful.
I'd like if the lines were longer. This has a really choppy feel right now and if it were smoother, I think the story would bring itself out more. The fear, the relief. Everything would be clearer.
But I really do like it.
Felicia.
56felicia13This is a nice piece. I love the end. "and the only / remnant / of this harrowing event / is the gentle shaking / of my hands." Beautiful.
I'd like if the lines were longer. This has a really choppy feel right now and if it were smoother, I think the story would bring itself out more. The fear, the relief. Everything would be clearer.
But I really do like it.
Felicia.
1/31/2009 c1 19Burnt Bread
I completely understand. When you've eaten something that's off, chances are the poo is going to be painful.
19Burnt BreadI completely understand. When you've eaten something that's off, chances are the poo is going to be painful.
5/5/2008 c1 44S.C.R.E.A.M.I.N.G
It flows. It draws the reader in. It's unusual, curious, and makes me wonder. It also has a quality that makes me fall in love with it. I can't pinpoint it, I'm not sure why, but whatever it is... it's good. Amazing, even.
44S.C.R.E.A.M.I.N.GIt flows. It draws the reader in. It's unusual, curious, and makes me wonder. It also has a quality that makes me fall in love with it. I can't pinpoint it, I'm not sure why, but whatever it is... it's good. Amazing, even.