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AWESOME!
This rocks my freakin pink sockss!
lol@ the parts where nichole is yelling at Josh
xD
LOVE THIS!
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2iPodAWESOME!
This rocks my freakin pink sockss!
lol@ the parts where nichole is yelling at Josh
xD
LOVE THIS!
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6/10/2008 c3 iPod
hey, you've got a few confusing typos
one: grabbed the cars out of the ignition
two: kept in tough
anyway, i love the story and the outline.
hey, you've got a few confusing typos
one: grabbed the cars out of the ignition
two: kept in tough
anyway, i love the story and the outline.
6/10/2008 c4 crazeedaizee411
This was my favorite chapter so far! I can't wait to see what happens next!
Update soon! :D
This was my favorite chapter so far! I can't wait to see what happens next!
Update soon! :D
6/9/2008 c4 3youjerkmuffin
ACK! This is one of thee best stories I have read on FP.
Of course, you know, there are a coulpe of misplaced or missing quotation marks but, other than that, great job!
neonchickennugget
3youjerkmuffinACK! This is one of thee best stories I have read on FP.
Of course, you know, there are a coulpe of misplaced or missing quotation marks but, other than that, great job!
neonchickennugget
6/9/2008 c4 rachelaine
This was really good. By far the best chapter. At first, I thought this was going to be stupid, just because "changing the status quo" and everything. I thought you could of made it less, little kidish maybe. It's really turning into a story now. I think im really going to like it! :)
This was really good. By far the best chapter. At first, I thought this was going to be stupid, just because "changing the status quo" and everything. I thought you could of made it less, little kidish maybe. It's really turning into a story now. I think im really going to like it! :)
5/20/2008 c3 2A.M. Autography
^_^ Really awesome story. I can't wait for the next update. I would have reviewed last night...but fiction press wouldn't let me login!
2A.M. Autography^_^ Really awesome story. I can't wait for the next update. I would have reviewed last night...but fiction press wouldn't let me login!
4/22/2008 c1 56Luna Turner
I would say it's too brief, but it IS an intro, so that's acceptable.
I don't think you ever said the main character's name, but you did an EXCELLENT job decribing her. The other characters I was somewhat disappointed with, but like I said, it's an intro, so I'm not exactly sure...
It sounds like a cliche' story, but has the potential to be something more, you know?
I liked your word usage, but the plot was a little jumpy. Like, I still don't know how we got to detention, but maybe it's just me.
Please keep writing and I'll keep reading!
~Luna Turner
56Luna TurnerI would say it's too brief, but it IS an intro, so that's acceptable.
I don't think you ever said the main character's name, but you did an EXCELLENT job decribing her. The other characters I was somewhat disappointed with, but like I said, it's an intro, so I'm not exactly sure...
It sounds like a cliche' story, but has the potential to be something more, you know?
I liked your word usage, but the plot was a little jumpy. Like, I still don't know how we got to detention, but maybe it's just me.
Please keep writing and I'll keep reading!
~Luna Turner