for Gothic Enchantment6/23/2015 c4 augmentedDREAMS
What do I think?
Nah. I would've preferred if Rose had refused to forgive him. And I mean really, it could have used more build up. Gabriel practically used Rose and their relationship was entirely a lie. Also, I was coming to think that this was going to be a fun story about a good girl and a goth and I was starting to like it, which is rare since I don't usually like these kind of stories.
Maybe you can reflect on how difficult it is for Rose to cope with all this in the next chapters. Rose- and I bet the readers as well- fell in love with Cloud. Not Gabriel. She fell in love with Cloud's arrogance and unique behaviour. At least that's my opinion. Just like you said in this chapter, Gabriel is a completely different person now and I don't know how I can accept that so easily.
What do I think?
Nah. I would've preferred if Rose had refused to forgive him. And I mean really, it could have used more build up. Gabriel practically used Rose and their relationship was entirely a lie. Also, I was coming to think that this was going to be a fun story about a good girl and a goth and I was starting to like it, which is rare since I don't usually like these kind of stories.
Maybe you can reflect on how difficult it is for Rose to cope with all this in the next chapters. Rose- and I bet the readers as well- fell in love with Cloud. Not Gabriel. She fell in love with Cloud's arrogance and unique behaviour. At least that's my opinion. Just like you said in this chapter, Gabriel is a completely different person now and I don't know how I can accept that so easily.
12/21/2013 c4 Guest
UPDATE
UPDATE
9/20/2013 c4 Amy
This is so amazing! I really hope you update it again soon. I really liked your surprise twist, with all of Cloud's crew actually being cops. Although I do hope we get to see "Cloud" again sometime, he's just too sexy to ignore ;) Maybe some more background info on them now that we know who they really are? Looking forward to seeing an update soon. -Amy
This is so amazing! I really hope you update it again soon. I really liked your surprise twist, with all of Cloud's crew actually being cops. Although I do hope we get to see "Cloud" again sometime, he's just too sexy to ignore ;) Maybe some more background info on them now that we know who they really are? Looking forward to seeing an update soon. -Amy
8/27/2013 c4 Guest
can u please update this again?!
can u please update this again?!
8/10/2013 c4 Guest
umm, is this the end? it's a great story, but what about kyria and the trafficking? is there more?
umm, is this the end? it's a great story, but what about kyria and the trafficking? is there more?
1/30/2013 c4 Guest
Dude who would you cast if this was a movie cause I cant picture anyone its kinda hard! can you help me out? Although I was thinking Andy Biersack as Gabriel
Dude who would you cast if this was a movie cause I cant picture anyone its kinda hard! can you help me out? Although I was thinking Andy Biersack as Gabriel
10/22/2012 c4 
1Sachi Nehme
Woah. Just... Woah.
Okay, so this was very surprising. I mean, it makes sense in a roundabout way, but this would have never cross my mind. Ever.
So, I'm going to start off with the big thing and work my way down: age. I'm not going to lie-I find it highly creepy that a cop (who has to be in his mid to late 20s if he's experienced enough to go undercover in this sort of thing) kind of preyed on Rose like that. Not saying that he DID, but that's kind of what it feels like because it's one thing for him to be a predatorial teenager and another to be an ADULT who is aware of her inexperience and continues to go through with his actions.
I'm having a bit of trouble with Cassandra and Gabriel, though. Because I don't quite understand why Gabriel's sister, a civilian if you will, needed to be involved if she wasn't a cop. Is she still the same age as Rose, or is she around her brother's age? And then I find it a bit weird that she's asking for Rose to go over to their house after all of this because no matter what, Rose is underage (right?).
Which brings me to my next point: it would endanger Gabriel's career to be involved with Rose after his undercover work, most especially if she's underage. And if he was willing to do so much stuff, such take part in sexual acts, for his career, I don't think he would jeopardize that for a girl he fell in love (?) with. Though, I'm sure you have something planned to explain that because sometimes people just do weird things when in love.
Over all, though, I think you worked this out quite nicely. While the surprise you had in store might not be to my particular liking, the fact that I was able to think so in depth about it and form a strong opinion on it says that it's still well-written. I look forward to seeing what you do next!
1Sachi NehmeWoah. Just... Woah.
Okay, so this was very surprising. I mean, it makes sense in a roundabout way, but this would have never cross my mind. Ever.
So, I'm going to start off with the big thing and work my way down: age. I'm not going to lie-I find it highly creepy that a cop (who has to be in his mid to late 20s if he's experienced enough to go undercover in this sort of thing) kind of preyed on Rose like that. Not saying that he DID, but that's kind of what it feels like because it's one thing for him to be a predatorial teenager and another to be an ADULT who is aware of her inexperience and continues to go through with his actions.
I'm having a bit of trouble with Cassandra and Gabriel, though. Because I don't quite understand why Gabriel's sister, a civilian if you will, needed to be involved if she wasn't a cop. Is she still the same age as Rose, or is she around her brother's age? And then I find it a bit weird that she's asking for Rose to go over to their house after all of this because no matter what, Rose is underage (right?).
Which brings me to my next point: it would endanger Gabriel's career to be involved with Rose after his undercover work, most especially if she's underage. And if he was willing to do so much stuff, such take part in sexual acts, for his career, I don't think he would jeopardize that for a girl he fell in love (?) with. Though, I'm sure you have something planned to explain that because sometimes people just do weird things when in love.
Over all, though, I think you worked this out quite nicely. While the surprise you had in store might not be to my particular liking, the fact that I was able to think so in depth about it and form a strong opinion on it says that it's still well-written. I look forward to seeing what you do next!
8/2/2012 c4 vampireprincess003
The cop thing was very clever and I love it. I really wish you would update bc this is a really good story and I don't usually read things with so lil chapters but your story just drew me in. I really hope you did not give up on it
The cop thing was very clever and I love it. I really wish you would update bc this is a really good story and I don't usually read things with so lil chapters but your story just drew me in. I really hope you did not give up on it
8/26/2011 c4 1Susan Holt
They're cops? I never expected that! Wow!
I'm not sure how I feel about that... but you know? It kinda makes sense.
I hope you'll find it inside you again to update soon! Hahahaha
Your crowd is waiting impatiently. :)))
1Susan HoltThey're cops? I never expected that! Wow!
I'm not sure how I feel about that... but you know? It kinda makes sense.
I hope you'll find it inside you again to update soon! Hahahaha
Your crowd is waiting impatiently. :)))
8/17/2011 c3 2IamyourVampire
Okay so I see why people were a little unhappy. I feel like it's a completely different story and it has a totally different feel than from the begginning. I'm glad there was an update though=D the writting was still really good. It just got way to different at the end. I'm not saying it's bad but I'm just not sure how I feel about it yet. It was a shock=D is there going to be more? Thank you for the update and if anything I said didn't make sense please let me know. I hope you are happy with what you wrote because if you are then that's all hat matters=D
2IamyourVampireOkay so I see why people were a little unhappy. I feel like it's a completely different story and it has a totally different feel than from the begginning. I'm glad there was an update though=D the writting was still really good. It just got way to different at the end. I'm not saying it's bad but I'm just not sure how I feel about it yet. It was a shock=D is there going to be more? Thank you for the update and if anything I said didn't make sense please let me know. I hope you are happy with what you wrote because if you are then that's all hat matters=D
8/17/2011 c4 IamyourVampire
Omgosh thank you sooo freaking much for updating! I haven't read it yet because I had to thank you for updating. Thank you sooo much. I hope more inspiration will come to you=D I'm off to read the new chapter now and I'm soooo excited!=D
Omgosh thank you sooo freaking much for updating! I haven't read it yet because I had to thank you for updating. Thank you sooo much. I hope more inspiration will come to you=D I'm off to read the new chapter now and I'm soooo excited!=D
7/17/2011 c4 3PassionPen
Hey, I'm happy your back :D I didnt like this chapter though. I liked them as Goths and them being polic officers doesnt make sense... i dunno..i just didnt enjoy it as much. Anyways, welcome back :)
3PassionPenHey, I'm happy your back :D I didnt like this chapter though. I liked them as Goths and them being polic officers doesnt make sense... i dunno..i just didnt enjoy it as much. Anyways, welcome back :)