5/16/2015 c31 tyves986
So I think I have read all your longer stories. I liked this though probably not as much as I liked Mascara. Nate was probably the best part of this story. I find your main characters the best part of of Mascara and this one. I thought Alex was extremely unlikeable at first (in a History of Southbrook), but he grew on me. This one took me longer to complete I am not sure why, I think some of Nate's ramblings were to much. He thinks a lot though I picture him as this guy that looks like he doesn't think at all.

It's kind of funny, I thought Nate and Jesse were gonna disappear into the sunset with the baseball bat and find it was worth way more than 2000 when they got to LA. The ending though was much more romantic ("out of this world" feeling that I think fits the story). I mean I was thinking along the same lines of Jesse, that Nate was just paranoid, even with that phone call he overheard. That Crisler was in no way CIA. Nate gets into UCLA, I wonder if Jesse even did. They didn't event talk about it.

I also felt that this was the most well-rounded stories out of the three. Thanks for writing it. Though you probably don't check this anymore. If you do, I guess I would like to know where you are writing, so I can check your newer things out.

9/4/2014 c31 MizuAz
Beautiful, beautiful, beautiful. You mentioned several times that you weren't having fun writing this story, and that you thought it was rambly, but it really comes across as cohesive, with an excellent flow, an interesting and well-conceived plot, fully fleshed with excellent twists and turns that had me so tied up in knots that I couldn't eat. Nate's character was just amazing, as was the most memorable Jesse Jones. The supporting cast were perfect for this sad little town. You captured so much in this story - that claustrophobic, horrific sensation of being a sane human being trapped in an insane, small, religious town. The way all the kids turned against Nate was dramatic, but exactly how teens are, and I loved how Eric used "god" as his imaginary source of power once he didn't get his way. He was the antithesis of Nate. Even though he used NATE'S strength to come out, he was weak, had no follow-through or force of personality, and therefore had to fall back on all the petty b.s. that his entire town stood on. You are an amazing writer, and I hope you're still gifting the world with your talent, somewhere. And I especially hope that you're still writing slash! Your ability to use language in such a casual way, but with constant surprises had me in awe in almost every chapter. You took the time to stay dedicated to finish a story you weren't enjoying writing (although it never showed - I was sorry that you weren't having fun with it, though), and you have such excellent skills that I don't know if I noticed but one or two grammar mistakes, and no spelling ones that stood out. That alone is noteworthy, on a free posting site! Thank you again for sharing this with us!

8/31/2014 c31 lostlamb
Oh this was cute. The ups and downs. Wow. And Nate's whole psychotic rampage there. Yeah it was cute.

3/26/2014 c1 Sneaky-Ninja-Muffin
Oh dear God, I know I'm going to love this! HAHAHAHAHA

11/29/2013 c31 Guest
Aha.. Your story was hilarious. Nick was too cute sometimes.
I look foward to your other stories.

9/17/2013 c21 allancaldera
Oh that means he love Jesse.

5/30/2013 c31 michi
I really hope the reason you aren't writing here anymore is because you are publishing. I would buy your books and I'm certain others here would, too. That said, amazing story. One of the best here.