5/19/2012 c31 6R.P. Ann
Okay. Finally I finished. I tried not to read this chapter all this day. I really didn't want it to finish. It was really, really damn good. I loved it. And I really am reading your other stories. God. It was so good. Your writing style is damn good. I loved it. GAAAAH IT WAS AMAZING. Okay so I'd like to make a longer and more descriptive review but I suddenly had an idea for my story so I gotta keep writing right NOW! Buhbai! I loved it! 3 You are awesome!

5/17/2012 c11 R.P. Ann
I want to cry sdofhidfhg D: D: Oh my God if I were Nate I would have punched that evil mean brother of Jesse's I HATE BULLIES. Okay fine I hate on people. But I hate on bullies.

5/17/2012 c5 R.P. Ann
Okay so I just started reading your story and most of the time I review stories once I get to the last chapter but I can't help it, I need to review this one. Since I started reading, I've laughed really bad and I've been so caught in it, but this one was my favorite. It made my heart ache at the gay talk they had! IDRSIFUHSDIGF I LOVED IT. Like I mean, I can't stand straight pairings when I read online because like... I want to be a boy and not a straight boy, I want to be a gay boy. Seriously. Like that's my goal for my next life. I'm seriously comming back as a gay boy. I alread talked God into it. (LOL I'm not even religious XD Well, I believe in God and Jesus and all that but I'm not religious, like I don't follow the standarts of any religion, I don't believe in Church or the Bible.. or well, not in all of it. And I'm bisexual so I'm pretty into the LGBT community and I hate when religious people hate on 'em or on anyone for the matter, I hate haters (I know that doesn't make sense but whatever)) Oh yeah! I relate so much with Nate! Hahahaha we think almost exactly the same! Hahahha I'm hilarious like that XD Okay okay, I won't say anymore until I finish the story... or so I hope O-O

Buhbai!

Pats.

P.D: I won't add the story to my faves until I finish it because sometimes I start reading and I love it but end up hating it in the end, by I put you in my fave authors because you write pretty damn good and now I'm rambling an I should stop. SHUT UP MY BABBLING ME.

11/27/2011 c31 xfffxfxfx
I really enjoyed this story. Due to length, I'm going to cut it into three sections and discuss each seperately. The first section goes from the beginning until the satellite is dropped at Crisler's. This section is, on it's own, stunning. The characters are deftly described, and each seems to have a life of his own. I find Nate to be hilarious, in a way that seems effortless rather than forced or contrived. Jesse Jones is anything but the typical love interest, and again, he breathes with a life of his own. Even side characters who given little attention by the story are intriguing and full.

In the second section, the story loses a lot of it's narrative energy, and becomes a more rambling exploration of Nate's life. In spite of this, we get to see more aspects of Bethlehem and environs, get to know the characters better, and sink into their world. It's hard to say when the second section becomes the third, but the point of no return would be when Eric turns on Nathan.

The third section is pretty bad. It's no trainwreck, but the carefully constructed characters fall apart, acting in ways that are baffling and out of keeping with what we know about them. The plot becomes more forced. The ending is a complete Deus ex Machina. Ultimately, the whole fabric of the story that we have become invested in is unravelled. As they leave Bethlehem, we get a sense that they are simply fading out of existence, all of them.

However, as a whole, this story is an achievement. As a narrator, Nate is captivating and engaging. The story jumps and sparks with a narrative energy. The pacing is slow, but in the best way - none of the characters are in a hurry, and subsequently neither are we; we become enraptured in the common events of a small town. The world of Bethlehem has a ring of visceral reality. I'm going to go and read the rest of your stories, because this one has convinced me that you are a writer of talent.

8/2/2011 c31 Mangatake
Gorgeous every step of the way :D a bit long, especially when it came to all the misunderstandings between Nate and Jess, but ultimately it wraps up beautifully. Thank you so much for sharing. You are easily one of the best authors I've come across online 3

7/14/2011 c26 the0z3452
goddammit! when are these two morons going to grow up and admit their feelings to each other! *sigh* why are the pretty ones always stupid?

7/7/2011 c31 2Aske Nat
Great story, a lot of suspense. Almost unbearable at times, but really worth the read.