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21Faith Adeline
very cute ending. I hope he kills Karl, but that's just me. I'm prone to writing some violent scenes :) Keep it up and update soon.
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21Faith Adelinevery cute ending. I hope he kills Karl, but that's just me. I'm prone to writing some violent scenes :) Keep it up and update soon.
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5/9/2008 c9 pinkeclipse
ah! they kissed! im so happy they are getting closer! what is karl going to do? since he isnt going to go down quietly.
ah! they kissed! im so happy they are getting closer! what is karl going to do? since he isnt going to go down quietly.
5/7/2008 c8 989East-0f-Eden
wonderful, I can't wait to see what happens next. Don't keep me waiting so LONG! PLSE :)
989East-0f-Edenwonderful, I can't wait to see what happens next. Don't keep me waiting so LONG! PLSE :)
5/6/2008 c8 21Faith Adeline
good chapter. Couple things, thoughts don't need to be in quotes and again (I hate to sound like a broken record) I would combine the words. Just because it ruins the flow of the story to keep reading I am, I will. Otherwise than that, it's good.
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21Faith Adelinegood chapter. Couple things, thoughts don't need to be in quotes and again (I hate to sound like a broken record) I would combine the words. Just because it ruins the flow of the story to keep reading I am, I will. Otherwise than that, it's good.
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5/6/2008 c7 1Diespedes
Its really good, a little abrupt in places (where the flow could be smoother) but still interesting and attention grabbing
1DiespedesIts really good, a little abrupt in places (where the flow could be smoother) but still interesting and attention grabbing
5/2/2008 c7 989East-0f-Eden
loved the part about her niece and nephrew and supremely loved the part about Arlan. I would love to see some more chapters on Beauty in the Eye of the Beholder and A Maid's Tale. Could you just finish a story please? I don't mean to be rude. I just want to see how they end up.
989East-0f-Edenloved the part about her niece and nephrew and supremely loved the part about Arlan. I would love to see some more chapters on Beauty in the Eye of the Beholder and A Maid's Tale. Could you just finish a story please? I don't mean to be rude. I just want to see how they end up.
5/2/2008 c7 2Death the dentist
Your writing is really skilled it keeps you intrested the whole time, update soon!
2Death the dentistYour writing is really skilled it keeps you intrested the whole time, update soon!
5/1/2008 c7 21Faith Adeline
Mk, good chapter. First off, thoughts are just in italics, there's no "" around them. And, I would dignify his language a little, because he has been sleeping for a couple centuries, so that's gonna make a difference in his language. Other than that, keep it up.
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21Faith AdelineMk, good chapter. First off, thoughts are just in italics, there's no "" around them. And, I would dignify his language a little, because he has been sleeping for a couple centuries, so that's gonna make a difference in his language. Other than that, keep it up.
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