for Mother's Gift5/2/2008 c1 
17Luny Loona
I like the message behind it!
Although you kept the syllables of each line of each verse relatively equal, it doesn't have much of a rhythmic feel. You might want to revise your rhyme scheme.
But anyway. As I said, the message behind it is nice, but maybe you could put a little more into how humans are destroying the world.
Have a nice day.
17Luny LoonaI like the message behind it!
Although you kept the syllables of each line of each verse relatively equal, it doesn't have much of a rhythmic feel. You might want to revise your rhyme scheme.
But anyway. As I said, the message behind it is nice, but maybe you could put a little more into how humans are destroying the world.
Have a nice day.