
6/13/2008 c1
8AlexSanguine
Rather chilling ending. The only problem I see here is that you have...so many run-ons Try adding periods to some of your sentences. You really need it. It almost seemed like your first paragraph was one huge sentence, if you know what I mean.
But I like it. I would hate being stuck in one place forever that looked like where I lived but wasn't.

Rather chilling ending. The only problem I see here is that you have...so many run-ons Try adding periods to some of your sentences. You really need it. It almost seemed like your first paragraph was one huge sentence, if you know what I mean.
But I like it. I would hate being stuck in one place forever that looked like where I lived but wasn't.