for Coffee and Clichés6/3/2008 c1 
12Xalga
You don't have detail, which I personally enjoy. However, you make up for it with a quick mapping of character for each of those involved. Your dialect is well done for a conversation and I do have to say, realistic. Keep it up.
12XalgaYou don't have detail, which I personally enjoy. However, you make up for it with a quick mapping of character for each of those involved. Your dialect is well done for a conversation and I do have to say, realistic. Keep it up.
4/29/2008 c1 4TaurusGirl7
Aww this is actually really cute!
Very well written too
Good luck with the rest of your writing :]
4TaurusGirl7Aww this is actually really cute!
Very well written too
Good luck with the rest of your writing :]
4/29/2008 c1 9TuneOut
I liked the dialogue. I thought that it was well done and believable. The ending was cute but it seemed kind of rushed since it was like she was annoyed by him and then after a couple of lines, she likes him.
Nice job though.
9TuneOutI liked the dialogue. I thought that it was well done and believable. The ending was cute but it seemed kind of rushed since it was like she was annoyed by him and then after a couple of lines, she likes him.
Nice job though.
4/29/2008 c1 P
Cute! :) Nicely written. :D
Cute! :) Nicely written. :D
4/29/2008 c1 3acapella33
ahahhaah
i loved it. The ending was kind of non-believingly weird, but that's what made it awesome.
=)
3acapella33ahahhaah
i loved it. The ending was kind of non-believingly weird, but that's what made it awesome.
=)