
1/2/2009 c1
26Michael Kim
A more attentive editing would make this poem a lot more effective..
"seamed a lion" - "seemed"
and syllable count on the "the big was so small.." line could be better.
I think if you experiment with different structures, you'll have an even better piece.
:)

A more attentive editing would make this poem a lot more effective..
"seamed a lion" - "seemed"
and syllable count on the "the big was so small.." line could be better.
I think if you experiment with different structures, you'll have an even better piece.
:)