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for Through mine eyes as a child

1/2/2009 c1 26Michael Kim
A more attentive editing would make this poem a lot more effective..

"seamed a lion" - "seemed"

and syllable count on the "the big was so small.." line could be better.

I think if you experiment with different structures, you'll have an even better piece.

:)

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