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1/12/2009 c1 Carus
Oh, wow. I really like this. I think that the way you've portrayed the woman as being unknowingly destructive is really well done. Also, the contrast between her 'awe' at the beginning and the suggeestion of 'blasphemy' at the end was really effective.

I'm glad you wrote this in first person. It really makes it more powerful and it also shocks the reader. I felt so sorry for the narrator by the end :(

Great poem, keep writing!

-Amy

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