
5/8/2008 c2 MySunshine
drew, you're such a jerk -.-
i didn't like how he ignored li the moment sasha comes around. best friends? what a joke
i wonder why drew was so mad at li if he had sasha -.-
and why did melissa not tell li that sasha was up in his room, too? don't tell me sasha sneaked up or something.
i felt so bad for li. and i want to climb into your story and kick drew. maybe slap him, as well -.-
argh, i'm feeling so angry now .
but i still hope you continue ^^
keep it up~
drew, you're such a jerk -.-
i didn't like how he ignored li the moment sasha comes around. best friends? what a joke
i wonder why drew was so mad at li if he had sasha -.-
and why did melissa not tell li that sasha was up in his room, too? don't tell me sasha sneaked up or something.
i felt so bad for li. and i want to climb into your story and kick drew. maybe slap him, as well -.-
argh, i'm feeling so angry now .
but i still hope you continue ^^
keep it up~
5/8/2008 c1 MySunshine
aw, i love drew already! he seems like a totally awesome guy xD
i don't care if i have a dozen guys that i love right now x)
huh. i can't imagine being able to be around a guy i secretly love. i'd freak out and tell him, sooner or later.
but your story is awesome. it's very interesting, and cute, too.
and i like the way you write ^^
aw, i love drew already! he seems like a totally awesome guy xD
i don't care if i have a dozen guys that i love right now x)
huh. i can't imagine being able to be around a guy i secretly love. i'd freak out and tell him, sooner or later.
but your story is awesome. it's very interesting, and cute, too.
and i like the way you write ^^
5/8/2008 c2 123456DoesNotExist
Ello! Me again,
Well, this chapter is pretty good, except for the dreaded mirror scene. Is there any other way you can introduce your character's appearance? I can't tell you how many times I've seen the dreaded mirror thing... Just a suggestion though.
I'm also thinking though, that Drew seems just a little... not as... likely to get in bed with someone, much less Sasha... But that might be just me.
Otherwise, good job :)
Ello! Me again,
Well, this chapter is pretty good, except for the dreaded mirror scene. Is there any other way you can introduce your character's appearance? I can't tell you how many times I've seen the dreaded mirror thing... Just a suggestion though.
I'm also thinking though, that Drew seems just a little... not as... likely to get in bed with someone, much less Sasha... But that might be just me.
Otherwise, good job :)
5/8/2008 c2
4Nyleve Nalloc
Bah! You make me login to be able to review... no room to be lazy huh?
Well, there are a few little "," missing here and there- but then again I'm not one to care about minor details as long as the story isn't blatantly hard to read due to missing punctuations and grammar.
You have some good descriptions, but you've already been told that.
The story is that cliche which makes you all gooey wooey, and I love soccer so I think it's made of win. I just hope you don't do like other authors and over-extend the story unneccessarily...
Drew is an idiot for being oblivious. Some guys are oblivious and some KNOW what's happening but ignore it.
She should get a new best friend... or better yet, a boy toy.
Ahaha... kidding, kidding.
(Half joking...)

Bah! You make me login to be able to review... no room to be lazy huh?
Well, there are a few little "," missing here and there- but then again I'm not one to care about minor details as long as the story isn't blatantly hard to read due to missing punctuations and grammar.
You have some good descriptions, but you've already been told that.
The story is that cliche which makes you all gooey wooey, and I love soccer so I think it's made of win. I just hope you don't do like other authors and over-extend the story unneccessarily...
Drew is an idiot for being oblivious. Some guys are oblivious and some KNOW what's happening but ignore it.
She should get a new best friend... or better yet, a boy toy.
Ahaha... kidding, kidding.
(Half joking...)
5/7/2008 c2
3beautiful chaos21
I really like your story. I think almost everyone has liked a guy best friend at one point. Update soon!
BC 21

I really like your story. I think almost everyone has liked a guy best friend at one point. Update soon!
BC 21
5/7/2008 c1
1Jevanminx
Oh I like it, tis cute. Cant wait for more, and to see how everything turns out.
JM

Oh I like it, tis cute. Cant wait for more, and to see how everything turns out.
JM
5/6/2008 c1 123456DoesNotExist
So far, I think it's really sweet. Great job :)
I like your descriptions, they really help me picture the character in my mind, but they're introduced into the story a bit awkwardly.
R&R back?
So far, I think it's really sweet. Great job :)
I like your descriptions, they really help me picture the character in my mind, but they're introduced into the story a bit awkwardly.
R&R back?
5/6/2008 c1
18Project Empty
I'm actually pretty interested. The basic romance conundrum with the twist of soccer, and a small town feel- very intrigued - please, write more!

I'm actually pretty interested. The basic romance conundrum with the twist of soccer, and a small town feel- very intrigued - please, write more!