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11/24/2008 c1 10miss-ellen
Aw... It's hard to live a life like that :(

Good work, I'd just focus on using capital letters for your pronouns like "I"; and maybe use in your formating so that you can create verse blocks like -

"I saw a tree

It was a nice tree

The tree got cut down

Now I am sad"

This makes it easier for the reader and also makes the presentation of the poem look nicer :)

Minor details like that aside, I really like what you've written. I can relate, and I know how much it sucks.

Kudos for putting those feelings out there and managing to make it not feel superficial, as so many others tend to do.

- m-e

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