
11/11/2008 c1
4Imalefty
a review from the review game in celebration of its first birthday! :D
Hahaha, I like this one – it’s an unexpected twist on a haiku about an amusement park. I especially like the last line… XD
I don’t really have much else to say about it… it was cute. ^^; (geez, this isn’t even easy fix requirements… T_T) But anyway, good job. Keep writing!
-Lefty

a review from the review game in celebration of its first birthday! :D
Hahaha, I like this one – it’s an unexpected twist on a haiku about an amusement park. I especially like the last line… XD
I don’t really have much else to say about it… it was cute. ^^; (geez, this isn’t even easy fix requirements… T_T) But anyway, good job. Keep writing!
-Lefty
5/16/2008 c1
31ByYourSide
So short.
Yet... dang, can I say it's pretty brilliant?
I can already relate to going somewhere and getting drenched, having everything ruined and then wanting to leave.
=^^=

So short.
Yet... dang, can I say it's pretty brilliant?
I can already relate to going somewhere and getting drenched, having everything ruined and then wanting to leave.
=^^=
5/11/2008 c1
2dragonflydreamer
Yay, you posted it! Mind if I steal your idea?
I really liked yours. If once rained for had chosen only one, I thought that yours would have been within the top three or so that she was choosing from. I loved your first two lines. They sound so... poetic, for lack of a better word, and you did it while still mainting the syllable count. I must admit that the last line seemed a bit out of place compared to the first two style-wise, but the sudden change it mood worked out very nicely. This lovely haiku overall ^_^

Yay, you posted it! Mind if I steal your idea?
I really liked yours. If once rained for had chosen only one, I thought that yours would have been within the top three or so that she was choosing from. I loved your first two lines. They sound so... poetic, for lack of a better word, and you did it while still mainting the syllable count. I must admit that the last line seemed a bit out of place compared to the first two style-wise, but the sudden change it mood worked out very nicely. This lovely haiku overall ^_^