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5/17/2008 c2 21Lady Lucia
I like how you gradually reveal more and more of the dream as the chapters progress.

Pretty cool...it adds to the story's plot...hehe...
5/16/2008 c1 Lady Lucia
Hello there.

Interesting chapter you have here. One thing I enjoyed the most was your diction. I think it was that which gave your piece its distinct voice and sophisticated tone.

The main problem was grammar. A few missed commas...missing commas after certain phrases and coordinating conjunctions...comma splices...The regular junk people usually miss, but grammar is a minor thing which can be easily fixed at the very end of the revision process.

Other than that, good luck on your assingment and hope all goes well...Very nice...:D

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