for The Piano5/17/2008 c2 
21Lady Lucia
I like how you gradually reveal more and more of the dream as the chapters progress.
Pretty cool...it adds to the story's plot...hehe...
21Lady LuciaI like how you gradually reveal more and more of the dream as the chapters progress.
Pretty cool...it adds to the story's plot...hehe...
5/16/2008 c1 Lady Lucia
Hello there.
Interesting chapter you have here. One thing I enjoyed the most was your diction. I think it was that which gave your piece its distinct voice and sophisticated tone.
The main problem was grammar. A few missed commas...missing commas after certain phrases and coordinating conjunctions...comma splices...The regular junk people usually miss, but grammar is a minor thing which can be easily fixed at the very end of the revision process.
Other than that, good luck on your assingment and hope all goes well...Very nice...:D
Hello there.
Interesting chapter you have here. One thing I enjoyed the most was your diction. I think it was that which gave your piece its distinct voice and sophisticated tone.
The main problem was grammar. A few missed commas...missing commas after certain phrases and coordinating conjunctions...comma splices...The regular junk people usually miss, but grammar is a minor thing which can be easily fixed at the very end of the revision process.
Other than that, good luck on your assingment and hope all goes well...Very nice...:D