for The Silver Lining10/18/2008 c4 InSilverShadows
Aww, Ariel, my baby. -huggles- Clever, as always.
Aww, Ariel, my baby. -huggles- Clever, as always.
9/18/2008 c4 Edward
Okay I read that fast since I wanted to finish it and still study for a quiz, but it was good. I like how you describe things; though I still get a little confused along the story but maybe I just need to get to know your characters a little bit more. Continue it, I would to see how everything will continue and start to fit in. :P
Nice Job. :)
Okay I read that fast since I wanted to finish it and still study for a quiz, but it was good. I like how you describe things; though I still get a little confused along the story but maybe I just need to get to know your characters a little bit more. Continue it, I would to see how everything will continue and start to fit in. :P
Nice Job. :)
7/12/2008 c1 
2perusemyshoes
This is great so far. Your style is really quite entertaining, and I look forward to reading more. I'm impressed with the consistency of the period; a lot of times I find that on here, when writing in an older setting, people tend to shift in and out of it. Nice job.
2perusemyshoesThis is great so far. Your style is really quite entertaining, and I look forward to reading more. I'm impressed with the consistency of the period; a lot of times I find that on here, when writing in an older setting, people tend to shift in and out of it. Nice job.
7/5/2008 c3 9InSilverShadows
Dude. I finally have time to R&R... I have been having the pants worked off of me. @[email protected]
I liek Ariel.
And it ain't even time for a decent review. Sorry. :(
9InSilverShadowsDude. I finally have time to R&R... I have been having the pants worked off of me. @[email protected]
I liek Ariel.
And it ain't even time for a decent review. Sorry. :(
7/1/2008 c3 TigressofIndia
And I'm now officially confused. See how easy it is?
I guess it's the relationships between the characters. And the place names.
And I'm now officially confused. See how easy it is?
I guess it's the relationships between the characters. And the place names.
7/1/2008 c1 TigressofIndia
Hey Pookie! First chapter review, wh00t!
Fabulously entertaining first chapter. I love the line at the end!
Because I am a nitpicker, I feel I must point out that "ladder" is spelled with two Ds, not two Ts. *runs*
More reviews to come soon, I promise! Don't hurt me!
Hey Pookie! First chapter review, wh00t!
Fabulously entertaining first chapter. I love the line at the end!
Because I am a nitpicker, I feel I must point out that "ladder" is spelled with two Ds, not two Ts. *runs*
More reviews to come soon, I promise! Don't hurt me!
6/26/2008 c3 Aika101
XD okay it made me laugh, I like your characters personality. Some I can relate lol well continue, I read it slowly so I wouldn't get lost o.o he he but rly I like it and can't wait for the next chapter and get to know them all better.
Domo!
XD okay it made me laugh, I like your characters personality. Some I can relate lol well continue, I read it slowly so I wouldn't get lost o.o he he but rly I like it and can't wait for the next chapter and get to know them all better.
Domo!
6/2/2008 c2 InSilverShadows
Nu unul în automobil. That's Romanian for 'no one in the car'. XD Guess what I'm doing? EHNT. WRONG-O. I'm reviewing your story, dipshit. LOLFLERZXYQWERTYPANTS.
...I had Vitamin Water. XD
"Pink and bubbly, with lace trimming coating practically every surface, Winnie cringed each time she was forced to enter (which was quite often, as it was the only entrance to her attic/bedroom other than that pesky window)." It's unclear at first what is pink and bubbly. Throw an It Was in there, please. KTHXBAI.
Cute as always. You're beginning to distinguish personalities more, which his good.
Nu unul în automobil. That's Romanian for 'no one in the car'. XD Guess what I'm doing? EHNT. WRONG-O. I'm reviewing your story, dipshit. LOLFLERZXYQWERTYPANTS.
...I had Vitamin Water. XD
"Pink and bubbly, with lace trimming coating practically every surface, Winnie cringed each time she was forced to enter (which was quite often, as it was the only entrance to her attic/bedroom other than that pesky window)." It's unclear at first what is pink and bubbly. Throw an It Was in there, please. KTHXBAI.
Cute as always. You're beginning to distinguish personalities more, which his good.
5/27/2008 c1 1DigitalScripter
I found this fun to read. I'm surprised you don't have more reviews. Definently update soon.
1DigitalScripterI found this fun to read. I'm surprised you don't have more reviews. Definently update soon.
5/23/2008 c1 9InSilverShadows
Finally the chance to review. XD Shorter than I expected, but then, not everyone takes it upon themselves to write friggin' long chapters. (*beats self in rear*)
*clamors for Ariel* Whee!
Overally, you have a very strong voice, but I feel a bit like the dry wit overflows into your characters a little. It's one thing to have sharp-witted and snarky characters, but be careful to foil them all out evenly. Let some be really snarky, and others more muted or grumpy. You know what I mean? I think Ariel will make a good foil when he's introduced.
I like the name Winifred. :P
Kelifred. I'm changing my name to Kelifred.
9InSilverShadowsFinally the chance to review. XD Shorter than I expected, but then, not everyone takes it upon themselves to write friggin' long chapters. (*beats self in rear*)
*clamors for Ariel* Whee!
Overally, you have a very strong voice, but I feel a bit like the dry wit overflows into your characters a little. It's one thing to have sharp-witted and snarky characters, but be careful to foil them all out evenly. Let some be really snarky, and others more muted or grumpy. You know what I mean? I think Ariel will make a good foil when he's introduced.
I like the name Winifred. :P
Kelifred. I'm changing my name to Kelifred.
5/20/2008 c1 1Stockholm
I think, out of the entirety of this site, this is by far the most enjoyable piece I've read.
I simply adore your style; the way you describe things and keep an underlying dry wit about the whole thing.
The characters have their own personalities, especially Winnie, and I will definitely be tuning in for more.
1StockholmI think, out of the entirety of this site, this is by far the most enjoyable piece I've read.
I simply adore your style; the way you describe things and keep an underlying dry wit about the whole thing.
The characters have their own personalities, especially Winnie, and I will definitely be tuning in for more.