5/24/2008 c1 174a silenced revolution
The imagery really helps the emotion to be conveyed, as does the descriptive word choice. The poem is short but concisely effective. Good work.

Are you sure that 'wisty' is a word? I couldn't find it on dictionary dot com. Maybe you mean 'wispy'? ...Not sure.

I'd suggest putting a period at the end of the sixth line, and perhaps separating the piece into stanzas there. I think it would render it more organised and clean-seeming.

-Adrian, from the review marathon (link in my profile).