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5/24/2008 c1 4Imalefty
straight from the review marathon! (link in profile)

i like your use of alliteration with "s" and "p." it really brought the words out and gave them extra energy.

at first, i didn't understand the pulverized peanuts part... but i think you mean peanut butter? XD i thought the image of love being stuck to the roof of your mouth was a little odd... i couldn't really visualize it.

good job with this. keep writing!

-Lefty

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