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612simpleplan13
I did not like the fourth line 'cause it seemed a bit long.
I like the repetition, it flows well. I also like the ending because its so true, but I had never thought of it before.
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612simpleplan13I did not like the fourth line 'cause it seemed a bit long.
I like the repetition, it flows well. I also like the ending because its so true, but I had never thought of it before.
PS if you're bored today check your the Review Game and its Review Marathon (link in my profile)
5/25/2008 c1 59Tranquil Thorns
A little depressing, but it still makes sense.
I like how all the important things are pointed out; the fact that the poem doesn't talk about mourning anything trivial. =P
Nice ending lines.
59Tranquil ThornsA little depressing, but it still makes sense.
I like how all the important things are pointed out; the fact that the poem doesn't talk about mourning anything trivial. =P
Nice ending lines.