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11/22/2011 c31 2BeetrootIsPink
:O

In shock.

I.LOVED.IT

Dude...MARRY ME! Hahahahahahaha...seriously -.-

Jks, but still what a great story. So not what I expected. Shit ending...but I'm kewl with that (: The rest was awesome!
11/18/2011 c31 3Brightheart
awesome story. loved it a lot. i play the piano so i kind of understood ur referencing.
11/6/2011 c20 aargh
Haha, I LOVE your story so far. I've lol (literally) so many times. And playing Dvorak is soooo much fine. I SHOULD be studying...mmmmrph.
10/24/2011 c31 Whatsoever
The fluff, the fluff, the goddamn Fluff! I love love love the story! And oh i was hooked! U are an amazing writer! Have u ever thought of publishing? You should consider it. Your story gave me that warm fuzzy tingly feeling whenever there was a fluff attack. I wanted more SO badly.And not many stories are good enough to do that, ya know? Congratulations, u are amazing. Write more please :3
10/18/2011 c7 1leavesfallingup
I was intending to read through the entire story and then go back to review, but this chapter was too fun to pass up.

My favorite line was, "No.. yes… I like him despite his issues. See… I have a… thing for mentally diseased people."

That was truly classic. If I might venture a guess:Hal is actually attracted to her, but he never did anything about it for various reasons, including the fact that he thought his parents might raise a fuss and it might be awkward later.

A second guess: he always treated her that way in school to allay any suspicions about her living in his home. Am I right?
10/17/2011 c1 leavesfallingup
That was a very involved and informative first chapter. This promises to be an interesting story
9/10/2011 c31 2KissUnderTheStars
I've just finished re reading your story since you finished it. I don't think I've laughed so much at a fiction.press story, ever :) I just wanted to say that this is most likely my favorite story I have read so far. I've read other fake relationship type stories and none have held a candle to yours. Thank you so much for entertaining me with every chapter :) I wouldn't say I'm your biggest fan but I'm pretty close , I hope :) thanks again

Love Ellen xxxxxxx
8/25/2011 c31 2The Weatherwitch
aww! ^.^

*happy dance and squealing*

i loved this,

well done!
8/24/2011 c31 4wakeyourdreamz
HEY DUDE! Sooooooo I was seriously loving this story! And then it ended...and I was like..."Huh?"

Truly miffed because it is such an amazing story. It was really very strange and just when I was starting to wonder where the Romance came in, cause it was all Hate/Humor you posted an A/N about how love doesn't have like 'that'. True, but this is a story, I want a cliche story where she hates him at first but then starts to like him, slowly, but surely and I can see that it's going to develop into some sort of like. A lot of the time I was like...'Dude, she hate's his guts.' I got no impression at all that she liked him...and it was putting me off. The only thing that kept me going was the hope that it was cliche and that she'd eventually fall for his ever-prevalent charm.

I was getting all into it and then they get to the ball and I'm thinking maybe...they're going to tell each other. MAYBE, this it! And then the next chapter says 'FINALE' and we're skipped 4 months ahead and she's doing an interview and bursting into his conference to get him back.

I feel like there's a chapter missing. The ending was perfect, do not misinterpret what I'm saying. I just mean, you skipped a whole four months that seems highly relevant to the story. Within that four months...something major happens and he's now an actor and she's at Julliard and they're not on pleasant terms.

I know she briefly, very briefly covers what happened in her interview and in their little dialogue but I'm still left confused at to what happened. I don't want/need you to explain it to me, I'm just saying, maybe that's where a chapter before would've come in handy, to help make it all clearer. The 'going to Julliard' and 'becoming an actor' that was all kind of the motivation of their being together, when she got an audition, it was a huge deal. She ran to HAL not to her mother and he picked her up and kissed her or congratulated her or whatever - that's a big deal. And we've missed out on her acceptance. On his finding out that he got the role. We miss Graduation and how they've parted. WHY they've parted, and why on bad terms. We've missed the fight, the confliction/denial between the two about their feelings for each other and whether to tell or not.

I know this is a really long review and it seems like I'm just picking out the bad points but it's because this story is so amazing but...the ending is missing it's pre-ending. I'd suggest, if you're going to run with this and not add a bit about what happened within that 4 months that you maybe, re-edit the final chapter and put in more detail what happened. Maybe a "It's been four months since...da-da-da-daadaadaa happened between Hal and I." et cetera, would suffice. But if you're happy with it, then sure, whatever. :)

I really did love this story though, there were so many funny moments that literally had me 'laughing out loud'. I was on a peak hour train with people squished on me, reading over my shoulder and giving me strange looks. -shudders- public transport...oh the horrors.

Anyway, I'm onto reading the Difference between you and me, or whatever it was. _ The Soccer one! I suppose you'll hear from me then.

Great read!
8/22/2011 c31 chellygoesrawr
Since I've finaaaally made an account for FictionPress, I have got to say that this is one of the best story I've read. All the emotions and drama and oh gosh, just everything! Mister Monroe still scares me though, but I guess it's okay, haha.

This is one of the sweetest story ever and you're a great writer. Thanks (:
8/20/2011 c31 7smurf-love
dude i love it, my favorite part was how there banter went along so great with one another, they were both great and are just how me and my husband are lol, i cant totally picture that couple right in front of me now agruing, you did really well
8/18/2011 c31 WhispersOfmyHeart
Loved it ! wish there was more lol wish there was a real life Hal as well haha thanks for sharing.
8/3/2011 c17 2PotOfGoldXxx
You know what I think? I think Hal's grandma secretly loves Katie:D No seriously, I bet she gets really fond of her.
7/25/2011 c25 Hopeless Romantic
You're an incredible writer. I love this story. The storyline is great and so is the writing. I have been searching for this type of story for ages. Your story actually brings a warm fuzzy feeling inside me. Thank you so much more sharing this with us!

I really like Hal and Katie too. Hal actually reminds me of a friend I had a huge crush on :D And the chemistry lab scenes make me nostalgic about my high school days with the said boy :)
7/25/2011 c1 2S.N. Rainsworth
I love you.

I am -so- fucking serious.

One of the sweetest stories ever...even though Hal is an ass (romantic, stubborn ass) and Chad is just...ugh and Katie is just so oblivious sometimes that it makes me facepalm.

:)

-Summer
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