for Stepbrothers5/30/2008 c1 
18do the whirlwind
What makes clichés bad is how awfully written they usually are. You’re an excellent writer and I already adore this story. I'm certainly looking forward to next chapters.
Keep up the good work!
18do the whirlwindWhat makes clichés bad is how awfully written they usually are. You’re an excellent writer and I already adore this story. I'm certainly looking forward to next chapters.
Keep up the good work!
5/29/2008 c1 16Cinera
I hope this continues. i don't like it as much as perfect uncle but of course i still like it.
16CineraI hope this continues. i don't like it as much as perfect uncle but of course i still like it.
5/28/2008 c1 y
interesting...more please.
interesting...more please.
5/28/2008 c1 3nonaccount
Wow! A new xanthie story *and* possibly a Rasta Guy update! What's next, Publisher's Clearing House at my door? :)
I really like this, especially, Saul's snarky personality. "A strategic elbow released me from Grabby Greg, who fell to the floor with a burbling laugh and groan, and I stepped over him and opened the fridge, scanning its contents. Oh shit yeah, there was a half-empty canister of chocolate icing and a seemingly forgotten bottle of Absolut in the far back." That sounds SO foul - I'm actually surprised he didn't vomit all over the grass in the park.
Since you said you're almost done with this, how many chapters are there going to be? I can't wait to find out more about Daniel in the, hopefully, upcoming chapter.
By the by, cliches are cliches for a reason (and that's totally a cliche too) uh because when done well they're awesome! And, of course, yours will be done well. :)
3nonaccountWow! A new xanthie story *and* possibly a Rasta Guy update! What's next, Publisher's Clearing House at my door? :)
I really like this, especially, Saul's snarky personality. "A strategic elbow released me from Grabby Greg, who fell to the floor with a burbling laugh and groan, and I stepped over him and opened the fridge, scanning its contents. Oh shit yeah, there was a half-empty canister of chocolate icing and a seemingly forgotten bottle of Absolut in the far back." That sounds SO foul - I'm actually surprised he didn't vomit all over the grass in the park.
Since you said you're almost done with this, how many chapters are there going to be? I can't wait to find out more about Daniel in the, hopefully, upcoming chapter.
By the by, cliches are cliches for a reason (and that's totally a cliche too) uh because when done well they're awesome! And, of course, yours will be done well. :)
5/28/2008 c1 crimsonvampirewerewolf
hey this is a really good story u should contniue...plz?
hey this is a really good story u should contniue...plz?
5/28/2008 c1 magalina
Ooh, I should be reading your previous updates . But, I really like this so far, I´m curious about what happened between Saul and Daniel~ Hope you continue it soon!
Ooh, I should be reading your previous updates . But, I really like this so far, I´m curious about what happened between Saul and Daniel~ Hope you continue it soon!
5/27/2008 c1 MyNameIsTaken
Yay, though I'd be happy for a Perfect Uncle update! lol! This story sounds good already...ok...all of your stories are kickass.
Yay, though I'd be happy for a Perfect Uncle update! lol! This story sounds good already...ok...all of your stories are kickass.
5/27/2008 c1 2paledaisy78
interesting start, i'm definetely looking forward to the next chapter.
but im really excited for the perfect uncle update, lol.
excellent job in anycase!
2paledaisy78interesting start, i'm definetely looking forward to the next chapter.
but im really excited for the perfect uncle update, lol.
excellent job in anycase!
5/27/2008 c1 WitchGhost
Pretty cool so far. The plot may be cliche , but it's far superior to some of the stuff posted on here dealing with a similar theme.
I always like your character's voices, and in this story they're all extra unique, which is good. Even if the plot is kind of cliche at least we got these awesome character's to read about!
Pretty cool so far. The plot may be cliche , but it's far superior to some of the stuff posted on here dealing with a similar theme.
I always like your character's voices, and in this story they're all extra unique, which is good. Even if the plot is kind of cliche at least we got these awesome character's to read about!