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Daniel listens to country music? I think I just fell in love.
Well, not really, 'cause he doesn't seem like someone I'd like at all. But I also wouldn't have expected him to be listening to country when Saul came in.
[“Didn’t start shit, was just sayin’…you ain’t ugly, k?”]
[But Mom seemed happy, so whatever floats her boat, ya know?]
Aww, these quotes made me love Saul. 'Cause he always says he doesn't love his mom, but it's nice of him to be decent to her.
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Daniel listens to country music? I think I just fell in love.
Well, not really, 'cause he doesn't seem like someone I'd like at all. But I also wouldn't have expected him to be listening to country when Saul came in.
[“Didn’t start shit, was just sayin’…you ain’t ugly, k?”]
[But Mom seemed happy, so whatever floats her boat, ya know?]
Aww, these quotes made me love Saul. 'Cause he always says he doesn't love his mom, but it's nice of him to be decent to her.
2/24/2009 c2 centerfold
Awweh, I feel sorry for Saul for having to move. I know what that's like. ;-;
And the letters from the dad thing, I can relate to, too. Poor kid.
Also, eww at mothers' boyfriends. I hate when my mom dates.
Still loving the writing style, the storyline, the characters.
Awweh, I feel sorry for Saul for having to move. I know what that's like. ;-;
And the letters from the dad thing, I can relate to, too. Poor kid.
Also, eww at mothers' boyfriends. I hate when my mom dates.
Still loving the writing style, the storyline, the characters.
2/24/2009 c1 centerfold
Okay, first off, I laughed because I, too, have a character named Saul. Whom I love. 'Cause he's awesome.
I also love your Saul already. Way different from mine, but you've got his character showing through real easy and I feel like I know him. So, he's kind of an ass, from what I can see, but a great character nonetheless.
I feel sorry for his mom, though.
There was a sentence somewhere that seemed a little awkward or run-on or something to me, like there should have been a semi-colon instead of a comma somewhere, but now I can't find where it was again.
Anyway, I love that you use proper grammar and spelling and stuff, I love the style and the storyline so far, I love the characters, and I'm off to the next chapter.
Okay, first off, I laughed because I, too, have a character named Saul. Whom I love. 'Cause he's awesome.
I also love your Saul already. Way different from mine, but you've got his character showing through real easy and I feel like I know him. So, he's kind of an ass, from what I can see, but a great character nonetheless.
I feel sorry for his mom, though.
There was a sentence somewhere that seemed a little awkward or run-on or something to me, like there should have been a semi-colon instead of a comma somewhere, but now I can't find where it was again.
Anyway, I love that you use proper grammar and spelling and stuff, I love the style and the storyline so far, I love the characters, and I'm off to the next chapter.
2/8/2009 c17 3Max-Ashworth
The ending kind of makes me sad...but happy at the same time. You know?
I have a headache so I can't think of much to write, but I really liked this chapter. G'night. Arrivederci.
3Max-AshworthThe ending kind of makes me sad...but happy at the same time. You know?
I have a headache so I can't think of much to write, but I really liked this chapter. G'night. Arrivederci.
2/8/2009 c17 Rachizzle is too lazy to login
Fingerprints from Fletch or whatever the mom's boyfriend's name was? I think so. :( It's kind of like Danny cried for Saul since Saul pretty much doesn't cry, lol.
Fingerprints from Fletch or whatever the mom's boyfriend's name was? I think so. :( It's kind of like Danny cried for Saul since Saul pretty much doesn't cry, lol.
2/7/2009 c17 2slasherbynight6
Wow... that chapter was really good...
the whole scene with them both jackin him was so freakin hot.. lol..
i think my favorite line was '...and maybe there was someone like him once, but I can’t recall anyone who ever sparked me like Danny.'
they are really cute together.. and danny is precious, especially when he's hurting for saul.. if i'm not mistaken, i think saul is getting more comfortable with letting danny in.. if that makes any sense.. or perhaps i'm wrong.. lol.. i love the developing relationship, nonetheless.
just to let you know, it made me really happy that benji went as hannibal lector.. silence of the lambs is one of my favorite movies.. and jack the ripper is one of my favorite unsolved mysteries to read about.. lol.. i love how your characters are so diverse and easy to connect with.. you do a really good job of making them feel like real people..
danny's so freaking hot..
i'm going to be really sad when this story is finished.. it's so good! until then, keep doing the fantastic job you're doing.. i love your writing!
Keith
2slasherbynight6Wow... that chapter was really good...
the whole scene with them both jackin him was so freakin hot.. lol..
i think my favorite line was '...and maybe there was someone like him once, but I can’t recall anyone who ever sparked me like Danny.'
they are really cute together.. and danny is precious, especially when he's hurting for saul.. if i'm not mistaken, i think saul is getting more comfortable with letting danny in.. if that makes any sense.. or perhaps i'm wrong.. lol.. i love the developing relationship, nonetheless.
just to let you know, it made me really happy that benji went as hannibal lector.. silence of the lambs is one of my favorite movies.. and jack the ripper is one of my favorite unsolved mysteries to read about.. lol.. i love how your characters are so diverse and easy to connect with.. you do a really good job of making them feel like real people..
danny's so freaking hot..
i'm going to be really sad when this story is finished.. it's so good! until then, keep doing the fantastic job you're doing.. i love your writing!
Keith
2/7/2009 c17 21Faith Adeline
Good job, I liked it. I'm glad you're feeling better. Hope to see more soon!
Faith
21Faith AdelineGood job, I liked it. I'm glad you're feeling better. Hope to see more soon!
Faith
2/7/2009 c17 narcissistic
Haha i like Benji. he has a cool name and he's friends with Saul.. what would make him coller than that lol.
they ant keep their hands off of eachother.
Haha i like Benji. he has a cool name and he's friends with Saul.. what would make him coller than that lol.
they ant keep their hands off of eachother.
2/7/2009 c17 2mia5081
Loved it!
Sorry this review isn't long this time but si, please update soon!
~Mia
2mia5081Loved it!
Sorry this review isn't long this time but si, please update soon!
~Mia
2/7/2009 c17 Le1chi
Wow, great update. The soggy biscuit thing was really disgusting though..Who comes up with these? xD And I loved the moment where they were talking about the pictures, poor Saul, I wonder why he looked like that. Danny is so sweet.
Wow, great update. The soggy biscuit thing was really disgusting though..Who comes up with these? xD And I loved the moment where they were talking about the pictures, poor Saul, I wonder why he looked like that. Danny is so sweet.
2/7/2009 c17 8the Berserker
As always - you are amazing.
"There are bruises there. Fingers. Hands."
That bit made me almost cry.
8the BerserkerAs always - you are amazing.
"There are bruises there. Fingers. Hands."
That bit made me almost cry.
2/7/2009 c17 Corrupted Lungs
Aw, I like their sweet moment looking at the pictures,you know, when Danny talked about liking him so he picked fights just to hit him, I wish they had more of those.
Aw, I like their sweet moment looking at the pictures,you know, when Danny talked about liking him so he picked fights just to hit him, I wish they had more of those.
2/7/2009 c17 8Sugar Coated Lemons
OUch.
VEry Nice chapter. Depressed me a little, cos it reminds me of me and my boyfriend that dumped me a week ago, the whole Just had him and want him again kind of hting. *sigh*
I like sauls sentimentality in the last bit,
8Sugar Coated LemonsOUch.
VEry Nice chapter. Depressed me a little, cos it reminds me of me and my boyfriend that dumped me a week ago, the whole Just had him and want him again kind of hting. *sigh*
I like sauls sentimentality in the last bit,