for Adam: The Irritating Paramedic6/8/2012 c1 madman
this is amaazing
this is amaazing
5/17/2012 c1 An
Aw this was so funny and cute!
Aw this was so funny and cute!
5/13/2012 c1 
9mussed
You know what would be awesome? WRITING ABOUT ADAM AND JORDIN'S PRE-DATE WOHOOOOOO!
Just putting that out there. *hint* *hint*
9mussedYou know what would be awesome? WRITING ABOUT ADAM AND JORDIN'S PRE-DATE WOHOOOOOO!
Just putting that out there. *hint* *hint*
12/20/2011 c1 24xoxluurve
It started off great and original and the narrator was engaging. But then when Adam came they all just fell into a generic role. Adam was that sexy overconfident asshole and Jordin fell into that temperamental stubborn girl who pretends she doesn't like him but reluctantly agrees to go out with him. What really annoyed me was the scene in the ambulance. That was so unprofessional on so many levels. I volunteer a lot in the hospital, and even if I didn't, I know that professionalism should be kept while you're on the job. The girl is bleeding and the guy is flirting with her? (SERIOUSLY?) Their job is to calm them, and just because he's hot doesn't give him the right to use his good looks. That's harassment, especially since it could be claimed that she wasn't right in the head at the time of his "attack" (after all, she was just shot). So yes, I just wanted to point that out. Perhaps work on it from after the paramedics arrive? Your writing style is great, very readable, but the characterization/lack of needs a lot of work.
24xoxluurveIt started off great and original and the narrator was engaging. But then when Adam came they all just fell into a generic role. Adam was that sexy overconfident asshole and Jordin fell into that temperamental stubborn girl who pretends she doesn't like him but reluctantly agrees to go out with him. What really annoyed me was the scene in the ambulance. That was so unprofessional on so many levels. I volunteer a lot in the hospital, and even if I didn't, I know that professionalism should be kept while you're on the job. The girl is bleeding and the guy is flirting with her? (SERIOUSLY?) Their job is to calm them, and just because he's hot doesn't give him the right to use his good looks. That's harassment, especially since it could be claimed that she wasn't right in the head at the time of his "attack" (after all, she was just shot). So yes, I just wanted to point that out. Perhaps work on it from after the paramedics arrive? Your writing style is great, very readable, but the characterization/lack of needs a lot of work.
7/19/2010 c1 Ngoc1231
Actually, she has a point. Death is quite inevitable but men are quite unpredicable. And I do like the line: "Alright, I've written my number and address on this paper. If you lose it I'll have to look for your cute little ass all over the friggin' city. So don't lose it." I think it is so cute!
Love the story. And he oddly enough reminds me of Milo Ventimiglia, in heroes when he was a paramedic haha. Although milo didn't have a piercing.
~*~Ngoc1231~*~
Actually, she has a point. Death is quite inevitable but men are quite unpredicable. And I do like the line: "Alright, I've written my number and address on this paper. If you lose it I'll have to look for your cute little ass all over the friggin' city. So don't lose it." I think it is so cute!
Love the story. And he oddly enough reminds me of Milo Ventimiglia, in heroes when he was a paramedic haha. Although milo didn't have a piercing.
~*~Ngoc1231~*~
7/3/2010 c1 2Abrasive
The concept was good, attractive, and it started out well. However, after Jordin was shot I felt that it fell flat: Adam was just another cocky, goodlooking guy, like any other. Furthermore, their kiss in the ambulance and all subsequent occurrences were a little too contrived for my liking. I'm aware it's fiction, but there still needs to be an element of believability, and I didn't see that after Jordin was shot.
2AbrasiveThe concept was good, attractive, and it started out well. However, after Jordin was shot I felt that it fell flat: Adam was just another cocky, goodlooking guy, like any other. Furthermore, their kiss in the ambulance and all subsequent occurrences were a little too contrived for my liking. I'm aware it's fiction, but there still needs to be an element of believability, and I didn't see that after Jordin was shot.
5/9/2010 c1 3LanternLight13
I thought her reaction to being shot was very, er, interesting. Cute story. Thanks for sharing.
3LanternLight13I thought her reaction to being shot was very, er, interesting. Cute story. Thanks for sharing.
2/13/2010 c1 Aiko
Your characters are really good/likable and the near-death-by-gunshot scenario is pretty awesome. However, I am pretty sure that medical teams have rules about how they ought to be behaving around patients lest they get sued or lose thier job...
Your characters are really good/likable and the near-death-by-gunshot scenario is pretty awesome. However, I am pretty sure that medical teams have rules about how they ought to be behaving around patients lest they get sued or lose thier job...
12/15/2009 c1 14Beautiful Destination
I love how you can put humor in a story about someone getting shot. Seriously. This was brilliant.
14Beautiful DestinationI love how you can put humor in a story about someone getting shot. Seriously. This was brilliant.