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4/12/2009 c2 JuniperRhose
This story is very interesting, but watch your editing. Sometimes the word placement gets confusing. Hope to read more!
6/15/2008 c2 6Sophelia
i haven't read very many stories under the mythology category, but this was a pretty good beginning for a story. you've got a pretty interesting setting, with the whole "Dying Leaf" and "Big Sleep" seasons and priests and rituals.

as a suggestion, i think it would help to describe the setting and culture of this place even more. i'm guessing talim's not a realy place (?) - so if you can describe what it's like in even greater detail, it would be easier for your readers to imagine what's taking place. anyways, keep it up =]

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