for A sea full of sorrow7/1/2008 c1 
10Koki Enwai
Wow. This was really different, but in a good way. I liked it a lot.
Thanks for the great read!
- Koki
10Koki EnwaiWow. This was really different, but in a good way. I liked it a lot.
Thanks for the great read!
- Koki
6/3/2008 c1 94AK the Twilight
You really personified the Sun and Moon well, and producing such a morose origin of the Earth's ocean was actually quite surprising. I had expected something fantastic and less solemn, but this was an interesting idea making the Earth's ocean a result of sadness.
There were some grammar errors throughout. Some sentences lacking of commas made the sentences a bit hard to follow. It was negligible compared to the story, but check up on that to make it easier to read. All in all, I liked this work. It was a well placed piece of short mythology with a great story and solid personification. Thumbs-up.
94AK the TwilightYou really personified the Sun and Moon well, and producing such a morose origin of the Earth's ocean was actually quite surprising. I had expected something fantastic and less solemn, but this was an interesting idea making the Earth's ocean a result of sadness.
There were some grammar errors throughout. Some sentences lacking of commas made the sentences a bit hard to follow. It was negligible compared to the story, but check up on that to make it easier to read. All in all, I liked this work. It was a well placed piece of short mythology with a great story and solid personification. Thumbs-up.